Feb 2022 fang-pop vampire ccwelcome
ohai - fair warning: suicide, albeit a romeo and juliet style
Well, this is what you get when I polish a song that's still in draft mode and has yet to have the fat cut. It has its moments, but needs some standardization in the sections, more melodic variation, clearer dynamics and a more concerted effort story-wise.. right now it's long because it's wandering, not necessarily because it needs to be.
This began as a very different song fragment, of which I had to toss some great writing because it didn't fit this theme. I have high hopes for it though- it was unfocused for about a week and then I sat down and did the process and it at least banged into a shape that could be performed..
If I said I met her on the internet
well that's not so strange these days
then again you might be surprised
when I tell you she's half a world away
Oh Countess I can feel you
in every character that displays
drawing me in
I never expected you
got so many questions too
like do the demons that chase me
differ so greatly
from anything in the world
that shaped you
that's hardly all you are
and you are
As yet unburdened by all that I am
why would that put that upon any person you want me
deal with this
But still I come at your request
suive moi
je vous attendais
Will you be as pale and frail as you seem
In your profile pic
why's the manor you live in
so terribly dark and depressing
So different from the roses
that have grown up around the estate
Suffusing the air with a sweetness
that speaks of decay
the keening of the sunset
as I come to you today
on the edge of the longest night of the year of the century
the millenium
and of all time
I dine alone
in whispers the voices of ancients attend
as I wait
for you to make your play
vous serez ma proie
sauve moi
je vous attendais
Finally you come
as frail as a bird and so white
a child at play in a world now empty
and cold
But you could have left
at any time you liked
the tarot newly dealt sits off to the side
you were never required
to puzzle out what it all meant
All you needed was the strength
to make an end
And I know you want to take me
to the only consummation you know
Oh, you've pricked your finger
See the blood flow and flow
If you let me take it
to my mouth
we will change
will break the spell
as it flows from you to me
let me hold you close
and in the way
of your kind
fall on me
open me wide
it's all right
and as the moment stalls
and time loses all meaning
we will end, this you, this me
Je vous attendais aussi
I see you
and suddenly recognize
I know the one behind those eyes
@rayboneor Mar 2022
This would be pretty nice even if it were just you and that acoustic guitar. The voice really carries the emotion of the lyric. There are lots of great lines in here, so I'd like to see what you tossed. A child at play in a world now empty--yes
@tomslatter Mar 2022
I enjoyed this. Some great lyrics in here. I enjoyed the 'demons who chase me' line. Great stuff.