I wanted to write a song about gay love and I wanted it to be damn beautiful. I think I got close.
These are songs that I finished this month but did not have time to record! Darn it.
I wish you could hear this melody because I really like it...someday! xo
What is it about
The roughness of his hair
The roughness of his hair that stirs me
It fills my heart with heat, and all points underneath
The roots of him are strong and worthy
What is it about
The beauty of his form
Whether I’m under or above him
A candle on the bedside table
Please allow me that
I want to see the fullness of him
(chorus)
When we lay face to face
The silence is enough
Your body speaks the language of you
The words can go away`
My fingers know your name
They're all I need to say I love you
What is it about
His strong and gentle hands
His strong and gentle hands that move me
The pressure on my skin
The quest to be let in
The sense that he can feel right through me
(chorus)
When we lay face to face
The silence is enough
Your body speaks the language of you
The words can go away
My fingers know your name
They're all I need to say I love you
(bridge)
Between the limbs that life has loaned us
Beyond a world that won’t condone us
The building of our fire
Climbs to the stars and higher
Until our bodies supernova…
When we lay face to face
The silence is enough
Your body speaks the language of you
The words can go away
My fingers knows your name
They're all I need to say I love you
@nancyrost Mar 2022
I think you achieved it! Strong imagery, sense of love and desire, and a rhythm that already sounds musical. Cool rhyme scheme and rhymes, too.