I just got home from work after this skirmish started and recognized that I missed a day of skirmishing so I tried to use the different prompts I saw from earlier to write a lyric that included them with this prompt about survival.
Prompts used include:
Treading
Manifest
Medicine
Wave
Survival
So it is dark, but sums up a bit of how I feel after working crazy busy hours and trying to FAWM as much as I can nights and weekends,
V1
like treading water
in tall white cap waves
struggling to survive
to stay afloat
one more day
feeling the strong pull
of life’s undertow
gasping for each breath
I taste the salt
as I pray
C
give me an elixir
or a capsule for more faith
a shot of strength and courage
or pill of hope would be great
prescribe me medication
that will help me survive
I have been drowning too fast
in this vast ocean…
ocean of life
V1
like writing a book
a manifesto of regrets
dwelling in darkness
of what I did or
did not say
knowing the spiral
of grief’s tornado
destroying lives
along its path
I now pray
C
give me an elixir
or capsule for more faith
a shot of strength and courage
or pill of hope would be great
prescribe me medication
that will help me survive
I have been drowning too fast
in this vast ocean…
ocean of life
B
what can I do
to hold on?
what can I do
to hold on?
what can I do
to hold on?
I need a dose of You
dear God..
help me through …..
C
give me an elixir
or capsule for more faith
a shot of strength and courage
or pill of hope would be great
prescribe me medication
that will help me survive
I have been drowning too fast
in this vast ocean…
ocean of life
@nancycunning Feb 2022
I feel like I can hear the rhythm here, slow and almost falling asleep exhausted in the verses, and then spun up agitated in the chorus, then a really steady place in the Bridge. ... I like that a lot. Good write, and I like the skirmish medley idea....
@andygetch Feb 2022
I love the POV that could could represent many front-line or essential workers who have had to put themselves at risk and work harder through the last two years. Well written!
@vegansongs Feb 2022
Waves of despair but hope in the calling out for help. Well formed for a soulful ballad. Excellent skirmish write.
@scubed Feb 2022
The way you’ve taken a blender full of prompts and crafted a powerful, cohesive lyric is simply amazing! The image of being caught in a vast sea of despair, praying desperately for hope, is very powerful. Brilliantly done!
@jwhanberry Feb 2022
Love the chorus. Any one of those would help! Glad you got to skirmish a little.
@hmstreetteam Feb 2022
This is ambitious, to mash up a day of prompts and make anything of it, but I feel the story here, looking for a miracle and finding a way to keep going. Even if listeners are not in such a dark mood I think they will relate to the contrast presented.
@dock Feb 2022
I don't see this as dark, more like praying for relief. You have a great way of structuring lyrics for a song. This should make a fantastic one.