Feb 2022 ss022522g superskirmish survival wurlitzer one-take
Skirmish Song
A little late to start a little late to finish
Prompt Survival
I like characters that are shifty... this might be one of them...
Desperate Housewife Vignette
To survive
You’ve got to smile
With your perfect teeth
Your magazines
Your make believe
You’ve got to pretend
You love your life
That you shine so bright
But are you alright?
Cause I’ve seen you
Roughin’ around
With a broken bottle left hook
And this banshee eyed wild look
Yes I’ve seen you
In a dive bar brawl
You were supposed to be asleep
You were supposed to be with me
In the morning
You wear your smile
Kiss your child
But do you remember
what happened?
@taracraig Feb 2022
These lyrics during a skirmish?! Wow. Wonderful, tight story telling. “Roughing’ around with a broken bottle left hook” what a line! Impressive one-take-performance. Really good stuff.
@tjeff Feb 2022
This is very good, such a clear picture of her need to "look" good vs. her darker side. Beautiful piano/vocal, love your understated vocal sound.
@richardmasters Feb 2022
This is great. You've really nailed something here - there are so many people pretending to be clean and normal in their desperate attempt to hide the boiling cauldron hidden in their souls. Stand out lines were 'a broken bottle left hook and this banshee eyed wild look - brilliantly captures how you can see someone's true nature no matter what they do to try and hide it.
Yes I’ve seen you
In a dive bar brawl
You were supposed to be asleep
You were supposed to be with me
This section is a great pivot - I assumed, at the start of the song that you might have been singing about a neighbour or a associate but then it turns out you're living with them - gives the song a whole new dimension and extra edge.
@davidtaro Feb 2022
Oh god, what a devastatingly beautiful song. How do you come up with lyrics this good in an hour?! Slightly awestruck. Well done!
@scubed Feb 2022
This is great! You’ve told a powerful story very succinctly, and that spare accompaniment is haunting. Wonderful take on the skirmish prompt!
@andygetch Feb 2022
This lyric packs a lot of story into a few words. Enough so that the video was playing in my head. The melody pulled me in and wow a one take on a Wurlitzer. Impressive build and release to convey the emotions. Well done!
@nancycunning Feb 2022
A Stepford Wife sings a Torch song. I like how the deflated beginning rears up in the morning, then sinks back into the bed.
Great singing and great write!
@ductapeguy Feb 2022
'broken bottle left hook' Shifty characters indeed. Nicely done.