The stutter notes are an interesting idea. It seems to me that they lack context, but the repetition helps them fit it. A rhythm track to this would probably make it all more settled for me, but that doesn't seem to be what you want here. This could go so many different ways. . .
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@dock Feb 2022
The stutter notes are an interesting idea. It seems to me that they lack context, but the repetition helps them fit it. A rhythm track to this would probably make it all more settled for me, but that doesn't seem to be what you want here. This could go so many different ways. . .