I don't think we fly off to someplace when we die, so I wrote about that.
I'm a Ghost
© 2022 Cindy Prince
I'm a feather
I'm a petal
I'm soft
But like metal
I'm both clouds
And stinging nettle
I'm substance
But I'm air
I'm both here
And there
I'm thick fog
And so clear
Chorus
I'm changing before your eyes
I'm like a wisp of smoke
I'm not far away as you imagine
Would you listen if I spoke
I'm a ghost...ghost
I'm a leaf
And a tree
I'm water
Flowing free
I'm right here
Do you see?
I'm vibration
I'm still
I'm wind
In a windmill
It's me
That you feel
Repeat chorus
@barbara Feb 2022
Now this is more like it! I really appreciate this perspective and the beautiful way you expressed the other dimension of existence. So poetic and the short lines leave lots of room for musical interpretation. The question “would you listen” conveys a soft yearning.
A wonderful lyric!
@jwhanberry Feb 2022
Very deep spiritual take on the prompt. Nice work.
@tjeff Feb 2022
Each verse is very cool, great contrasting ideas. Love the idea of being a ghost and trying to communicate with the living who can't really hear you.
@wylddandelyon Feb 2022
13 minutes? Impressive. I especially like the first stanza of each verse.
@scubed Feb 2022
Gorgeous, gorgeous writing! “It’s me That you feel” brings a tear to my eye. Great skirmishing!
@crutherford Feb 2022
beautiful!
love those first few lines so. much.
I'm a feather
I'm a petal
I'm soft
But like metal
I'm both clouds
And stinging nettle
Gorgeous. Great skirmish.
@sheilerk Feb 2022
I like your different take on what constitutes a ghost! Some people do think of loved ones who've passed in this way, as things they see or feel in nature or the environment appearing at opportune times as messages, so it resonates on that wave, then gives a touch of the harsher ghost trope, with the metal and stinging nettle. Nice juxtapositions that draw you into the whole! Great skirmish!
@thedutchwidows Feb 2022
This four opening lines hooked me right in. really strong lyric and a great angle on the prompt. Very nicely done!
@hmstreetteam Feb 2022
This is very picturesque, which will quickly dispel some of the ghost stereotypes that listeners might come in with. The ghost’s hint of self-doubt in the chorus is a nice touch, reinforcing the thought that not everything is different for a ghost. This song will make people think.
@prsongsmith Feb 2022
I really love the direction you took with the prompt -- the idea that we ignore life as if it's a ghost, but it's there in everything we see, if we'll listen. "Both clouds and stinging nettle" is a brilliant line.
@andrea Feb 2022
Like being part of the universe. This is fantastic. The imagery is clever and beautiful. Very gorgeous lyrics!
@porrectus Feb 2022
Beautifully written, ghostly descriptors. Well done.
@unknownbecky Feb 2022
This is so gorgeous! What fantastic language and imagery. Such a wonderful, creative response to the prompt.
@whispermouse Feb 2022
Lovely message. I could see this set in some kind of Loreena McKennitt universe. Nice skirmish!
@mhorning Feb 2022
Lovely almost contradictory images.
@lowhum Feb 2022
Nettle season yeah!
@andyt13 Feb 2022
Cool!
@tamsnumber4 Feb 2022
I LOVE THIS!! Let me try to put music to it?? How can you do skirmishes like this...magic!
@ajna1960 Feb 2022
Love "Would you listen if I spoke", not just the actual line and meaning, but the rhythm and the very subtle alliteration.