For collab
I envisaged lots of hardcore industrial sounds and a spoken vocal. Almost robotic.
Slave to the Machine
Picking our bones clean
We barely survive
The one percent thrive
What happens when we stop?
Slave to the Machine
Picking our bones clean
The Killswitch is dead
Keep working they said
What happens when we stop?
Slave to the Machine
Picking our bones clean
What’s in it for us
Only their lip service
What happens when we stop?
What happens when we stop?
When we just have had enough
What happens when we stop?
Slave to the Machine
Picking our bones clean
Yet we all comply
Afraid not to satisfy
What happens when we stop?
Let’s stop
@elesimo Feb 2022
I added music here: https://fawm.org/songs/136361/
@writeandwrong Feb 2022
You are new to me on FAWM and I am enjoying seeing all the different genres in your tags. Very true... can't tell you how many people I've known that decided to retire, stopped working completely, and well... that was the end of that. Still gotta keep moving, but a slower change of pace is nice, something completely different to enjoy the rest of the years! My point is, many can sympathize with this lyric. Excellent energy flow for the write. Tight. #tit4tat4
@nadine Feb 2022
This is very cool! But I see the vocals rather in a agressive shout a la Skinny Puppy.
If I had my electro phase I'd turn that into badass aggrotech but unluckily I have to take a break from electronic music for some months or years.
@jayjay Feb 2022
@katestantonsings Thank you for the lovely comments, Kate. I was emailing with a writing friend trying to find a time we were both free. I said to him that it was a hard both being slaves to the machine. He said, that’s a song. Write it lol
I was almost think full Daft Punk, Robot Rock for vocal stylings. I do like the two you mention though. I am keen to see where @elesimo goes with this. .
@katestantonsings Feb 2022
This is a solid write, Jayjay! Robotic vocals you say? Do you like Ogre’s monotone vocal style from industrial powerhouse band Skinny Puppy? Or even vibes if NIN’s Broken record. I love the lyric “slave to the machine”. #tit4tat
@zeekle1998 Feb 2022
Nice, the repetition is has that machine like rhythm. I like the little rebellious lines at the end. I hope @elesimo gets a demo up. Let me know.
@davidtaro Feb 2022
Woah, dark but I like it. Can't wait to hear the music. Really enjoyed 'The Killswitch is dead' and the final 'Let's stop'. Damn right. #tit4tat
@jayjay Feb 2022
@elesimo go for it lol. Let me know if you need any edits. Otherwise play with it as you wish :)
@elesimo Feb 2022
Yeaaaah, this is awesome! Could be part of the #collapsechallenge. I'll start working on it, if it's ok!