Another inspired song from my sweet boyfriend. It’s nice having a muse for love songs. I thought it would be fun to create my own chiastic structure song with love at the center of it.
I also chose to do a four chord loop structure from the week four songwriting challenge
Oooh
I love you.
It means something when I say, “I love you.”
I know you could run away,
And you have that choice
I won’t trap with you with my voice
Like siren song
Would you care to join along?
Oooh
I invite you to walk this path with me
At your pace. It is not a race.
Sometimes I will lead and you will follow.
That’s what love is like with me.
At times you’ll lead, I’ll follow along.
If I fail on this trail,
Will you stop to catch your breath?
Oooh
Will you invite me in
And share your view, giving me new lenses?
I’m choosing you.
And if I fly, I will return.
I love you.
It means something when I say,
“I love you.”
@kerriwinter Mar 2022
went off to google "chiasm" - how very, very, cool and I love how you've used this structure here! nice one and lovely, healthy (i.e. not obsessive and desperate like many love songs can be!) sentiment.
@klaus Feb 2022
Marvelous sweet and gentle song. Lovely voice and delivery. Extra points for presenting a series of ideas, and then repeating them in the opposite order. :)
@richaaaay Feb 2022
Nice that you have such a sweet boyfriend that he inspires this sincere heartfelt song.
@kahlo2013 Feb 2022
What a gorgeous love song - very inviting and understanding! Really conveys a sense of caring kindness and love.
@andrea Feb 2022
This is a sweet love song. There is also a lot of wisdom in your words. Sounds like you have a really great relationship!
The guitar is so pretty, and your voice has this dreamy quality. It's beautiful!