I had the line Walk right up to you as my start, but then my muse took over. Needs music and vocals.
I Just Want You
© 2022 Cindy Prince
I saw you on the street
Wondered what I could do to meet
You looked so exceptional
I made a lame excuse
To walk right up to you
Just trying to be respectable
I was smitten right away
Couldn't think of what to say
Your smile was delectable
I explained I worked near by
And wondered if you'd think I
Was totally detectable
Chorus
You are so savory
Flavorful
I sure would like
A spoonful
You are like a morsel
A marvel
I don't even want
To be careful
I just want you...want you
I took a bit of a chance
Decided to ask
If you would meet me for a drink
I got the feeling
You were ready and willing
So of course I couldn't think
I dropped my brief case
And we were face to face
As we both tried to retrieve it
Somehow I knew then
I was totally in
And I was ready to believe it
Repeat chorus
@vainhirvain Feb 2022
Mmm an after-work romance! Well constructed and rhymed too. Nice usage of "walk" !
@mccannrs Feb 2022
"I dropped my brief case
And we were face to face
As we both tried to retrieve it"
A simple sentiment, but the imagery was so vivid in my mind. It feels like a scene out of a movie!
@crutherford Feb 2022
Right on!
I really love these lines:
You are so savory
Flavorful
I sure would like
A spoonful
You are like a morsel
A marvel
also, rhyming delectable with detectable
Makes me nostalgic for new romances - a lovely write!
Great skirmish!
@jwhanberry Feb 2022
That's a wonderful lyric. I like how the third lines of the verses rhyme. Very well done.
@thedutchwidows Feb 2022
Lovely write. For some reason I thought the object of desire was an ice cream, and the food-y references were literal rather than metaphorical. Like a double-bluff. But I think I might be over-thinking things. Or hungry. Either way, this is very nice!
@berni1954 Feb 2022
Great little romance song and the attitude of the narrator comes across so well, a mix of bravado, guilt and lack of confidence:
"I made a lame excuse
To walk right up to you"
@tiller2 Feb 2022
I love this situation-comedy-in-a-song. It's easy to imagine fluttering feelings that accompany the action: "I dropped my brief case/And we were both face to face..." One suggestion: "irresistible" as an alternative sorta-rhyme to finish the 4th verse. Well skirmished!
@ajna1960 Feb 2022
Oh true love ! Such a fun meeting and description, sweet too.
@musicsongwriter Feb 2022
Fun love lyrics, Cindy. So cool.
@keithcuts Feb 2022
this is a fun "nice to meet you" tune that i thoroughly enjoyed reading.
crafty songwriting for the short time and you absoulutely did your thing with the "walk" prompt!
nice!
@unknownbecky Feb 2022
I don't know what you call the wordplay that you did with morsel/marvel but I love how those two words feel together. Very fun lyric.
@tunecat Feb 2022
Some fun snd clever rhymes in this. The rhythm just flows. And her interest is clearly piqued ( is that how you spell it). Great write
@tunecat Feb 2022
Some fun snd clever rhymes in this. The rhythm just flows. And her interest is clearly piqued ( is that how you spell it). Great write