Skirmish # s022122
Theme: Walk
Amanda lyrics completed for a skirmish: Tenuous link at best to the theme lol
Song about a bad boy out on the pull, who finds an easy and obvious plum ripe for picking...
@seemanski has musicated this wonderfully. Full of all my imagined sleaze and sexual power and lust. Wonderful !!
You suck me in
With the way you walk
All smooth angles and pheromones
It's all mystery that you emanate your cheap click bait
I'm about to sin cus you suck me in
So you gonna come with me when
You've finished dragging all the jaws from the dirt
I can act the cool guy but
Underneath I'm just another jerk
You suck me in
With the way you walk
All smooth angles and pheromones
It's all mystery that you emanate your cheap click bait
I'm about to sin cus you suck me in
I've a tonne of lust for you but
Hiding stuff is easy when you know what you want
Leaving here with me is mad so
Maybe you enjoy being blonde
You suck me in
With the way you walk
All smooth angles and pheromones
It's all mystery that you emanate your cheap click bait
I'm about to sin cus you suck me in
What I want is easy
But you know already
Cus you feel quite sleazy
A little bit heady
Do you feel uneasy
Your back's all sweaty
My moves are cheesy
An my heartbeats steady
You suck me in
With the way you walk
All smooth angles and pheromones
It's all mystery that you emanate your cheap click bait
I'm about to sin cus you suck me in
@seppo Mar 2022
Ha, decent Johnny Lee Hooker with a twist.
Love the vox and the overall feelin of good old school rock.
Brilliant.
@thedutchwidows Feb 2022
Came back to hear what @seemanski had done with this, and wow, it's not a disappointment! Totally captured the sleaze of the narrator. That grimy riff is awesome and the vocals are superb. Those backing vocals on the 'you suck me in' parts are pure brilliance. Excellent work!.
@vainhirvain Feb 2022
Very cool collab, you guys rock! Jack White can go home :)
@sunfire Feb 2022
Hey! This rocks! Enjoyed listening.
@berni1954 Feb 2022
Brilliant! Totally rocks! Shades of ZZ Top combined with Led Zep (stadium rock period) thrown in.
@crutherford Feb 2022
damn. this is perfect. total gritty conviction. great dynamics. killer vocal. yup. this is a great collab. ya nailed it. bravo!
@tunecat Feb 2022
Yeah! Musicales alright! Great collab! Superb arrangement really creates atmosphere. Love love the stops especialkybfollowed by the suddden increase in volume. All the other kind of stops used to great effectt
@ajna1960 Feb 2022
@seemanski has musicated this wonderfully. Full of all my imagined sleaze and sexual power and lust. Wonderful !!
@seemanski Feb 2022
this is so nasty and I love it, I can hear a alternative rock kind of thing going on which is kind of what I like to do and I am actually very tempted to give this one a go if you'd let me.
@mccannrs Feb 2022
Ooh, quite risque. I actually really like your take on the prompt, sometimes the way a person walks can be quite desirable, lol! And it's great that you had a whole song come out of one small idea, that's what these skirmishes are all about!
@crutherford Feb 2022
oh i do like a wayward character.
you're done i great job here
investigating the underbelly
someone i don't want to know - but i totally have known!
and that's a great visceral feeling chorus
great write!
@thedutchwidows Feb 2022
Wow, that's an angle on the prompt! What a cool write. The line "It's all mystery that you emanate your cheap click bait" is one of my favourites line this FAWM. That one line says so much about the narrator and it's not good... Excellent skirmishing!
@vainhirvain Feb 2022
Skillfully written, something for the dancefloor for sure! "You suck me in" could make a good title and a hook, since it's placed both at the beginning and the end of the chorus. Also the way you drive the story further and bring those two closer and closer to each other as the song develops, is really skillfull. The word "sin" , to me, in each chorus gives a different idea as to what it refers to. Really a fine set of song text.
@porrectus Feb 2022
That's a saucy walk. Nice work with the imagery. Great rhythm to the words. Nice write. WEll done..
@jwhanberry Feb 2022
Quite an adventurous walk you took on this one. Ya gotta watch out for those "smooth angles and pheromones". ;)
@berni1954 Feb 2022
"you gonna come with me when
You've finished dragging all the jaws from the dirt"
Now that's a brilliant way of saying: "She was drop dead gorgeous!"
Great how you can get into the head of this macho man - who creeps me out with his mix of a guilt trip and his over confident faith in his ability to "pull".
@tiller2 Feb 2022
I can feel the lust and self-loathing together in this one. Strong images and even visceral sensations. Chorus is especially good: "All smooth angles" can refer to the other person's body or method. I'd like to hear how Sting would put this to music....
@mardeycranbleson Feb 2022
Great write, very visceral and vital lyrics! Chorus flows well can hear it as a song already.
@musicsongwriter Feb 2022
Very original take on the prompt. Strong and imaginative.
@sunfire Feb 2022
Great use of language for this one. Some really great lines. Good writing!
@unknownbecky Feb 2022
I really love how you used the word 'pheromones'! It's such a fun and surprising word that feels delightful to hear.
@tunecat Feb 2022
Ooer. Smooth angles snd oheronomes eh! It’s the way she walks - skirmish I like the bit about emulating ‘cheap click bait’ . Before I read the liner notes wasn’t sure if the protagonist was gonna be a boy or a girl. I like the sweaty section though she clearly hadn’t many boundaries …
@keithcuts Feb 2022
Oh what a take on the walk!
i like where you went with it. quite original!
your attitude is felt
the helplsessness is conveyed!
nicely done!