I've been rewatching You're the Worst, which has a really realistic portrayal of chronic depression, and that's what this song is about. Is the fuzz filter on the vocals too much? The vocal track should probably be re-recorded, but it's midnight and I line in an apartment so I can't sing it properly right now.
I pull my old skin off
I put my makeup on
I wear a pretty face
Pretend that nothing’s wrong
But I’m fighting oh I’m fighting a feeling
It’s a quiet war
A chemical affair
I pull my insides out
I lay my organs bare
And I’m fighting oh I’m fighting for feeling
Locked in my brain
Hungry for blood
The madness takes me under
You can say anything
I don’t feel anything
Won’t remember anything
I’m a fucking zombie
You can say anything
I don’t feel anything
Won’t remember anything
I’m a fucking zombie
I sleep at 5 am
I’m watching trash TV
I don’t want friends or dreams
The drama’s all I need
Yeah I’m trying oh I’m trying to feel things
I go to work all day
But am I really there?
Is there a doctor here
Someone to make me care
Yeah I’m fighting oh I’m fighting for feeling
Locked in my brain
Hungry for blood
The madness takes me under
You can say anything
I don’t feel anything
Won’t remember anything
I’m a fucking zombieYou can say anything
I don’t feel anything
Won’t remember anything
I’m a fucking zombie
@jorgevallentine Feb 2022
I want to play these last couple songs myself! Your melodies and lyrics are always so good. I think the whole thing could be even gritter/fuzzier so don't think the fuzz filter is too much at all. As I said on the last one you uploaded, I'd love to hear it faster (which is part of why I'd love to try playing it myself) but that may just be my style. I'm pretty dramatic about my playing/singing with the style I'm developing, so a song like this I'd love to have it kind of descend into chaos over time with it speeding up and/or going to screaming by the end. I like unleashing the wild desperation when it feels right if that makes sense. (Although also you said you live in an apartment so I'm not sure if it's feasible for you to be screaming if you even like the idea of that haha)
@dugganensis Feb 2022
Oh yeah, nailed the 90s sound. Not just the angst, but something about the key or mode of the melody, maybe? I don't know. But it's oddly nostalgic for hearing for the first time LOL. Very relatable lyrics. The vocal fuzz is very subtle. The subdued midnight take is perfect for an intro/first-verse style building up the expectation that the song is going to get big and loud any second.
@fonte Feb 2022
Oh yeahhhh I absolutely LOVE this. I don’t think there’s too much fuzz at all. I agree with Boycetown could probably add more. I really love the melody so catchy. Guitars sound great. Getting a great 90s grunge vibe. I can hear full production with drums and bass etc but this also worlds like this really well I think. Loved it.
@boycetown Feb 2022
Loved your song. You really captured the rage of powerlessness. The vocals are great, you could even ramp up the fuzz a bit if you wanted, but I wouldn’t change anything.