This was my submission for Feb. 20th's skirmish with "mad" as the prompt.
I haven't listened through the whole demo yet, but I just quickly bounced it up because I'm already 15 past the hour!
It makes me weak
It tricks my senses
It shakes my knees
I put up fences
What is the message my mind is sending?
Do I really need to be defending?
Am I lost? Am I in danger?
I am not. I don’t need anger
It sneaks into love
It makes my skin tough
I become less than
Thoughts I should question
Childlike tantrums make me a fool
Ancient phantoms ignite my fuel
When I’m mad I wear a mask of broken glass
Let it pass let it pass let it pass let it pass
What is the message my mind is sending?
Do I really need to be defending?
Am I lost? Am I in danger?
I am not. I don’t need anger
I don’t need it
I don’t need it at all
@berni1954 Feb 2022
Wow, I didn't expect that massive wall of sound to follow that quietly stated opening verse.
I like the way you bring out the mad demon in all of us throughout the lyrics. I loved the way after "Let it pass" the guitar sis chomping at the bit a little before launching into the next section.
Perfect soft ending when the madness is under control. And this was for a skirmish???? Wow!!!
@jwhanberry Feb 2022
Big dynamics make this work well. When the question in the chorus comes it smacks us good! Good quick work.
@tjeff Feb 2022
Love your rock arrangement, and especially love the contrast from soft-ish to when your heavy guitar comes in. Great vocal too, I enjoyed listening.
@thedutchwidows Feb 2022
This is a really sophisticated write for a skirmish; lyrically really strong, well sung/played, and really well-structured. I love the way the fuzzy guitar kind of breaks its way in. That's excellent work all round.
@tunecat Feb 2022
I read the lyrics first. I recognise this - probably adhd !! You set it really well the delicate drive of verses and then the very noisy chorus . Good write .
@mariekevinkmusic Feb 2022
Crunchy niceness. I'll never understand how people have time for anything more than a lyric and melody in an hour. Well done!
@andygriff Feb 2022
Whoa when those guitars kick in, that is such a moment. Great work there. Fine lyrics too.
@tcelliott Feb 2022
Oooh, wasn't expecting those guitars to kick in like that. Tasty. I love your use of questions. Unexpected in some ways, but I'm digging this take.
@tukayandryan Feb 2022
You achieved loads in an hour. Really interesting lyrics. Crunch guitars are great!!
@ajna1960 Feb 2022
Oh wow when those crunchy guitars kicked in !!!!!!! Just wow :)
Love the juxtaposition between the yearning gentle vocal and the screaming guitars.
@coolparadiso Feb 2022
i love the intro beat sets it all up! pretty deep thinking! if you know please let me as well! love the rise and fall
@sheslin Feb 2022
Oh cool instrumental track under your vocal melody. You accomplished a lot in one short hour. Nice guitar solo!! All the guitars are really well done. I like how the lyrics are like you are talking yourself through getting over anger. I really like your melodic choices also! Also nicely done with your rises and falls throughout the song - it is a nice journey.
@sheilerk Feb 2022
What a Rocker! I like how the dynamics change between something like intimate conversation to bursting with emotion. Excellent skirmish!