Something a bit less intense than my previous ones! This came to me very quickly in terms of the melody, and once I had the story arc the words kind of wrote themselves.
Execution-wise it's fairly rough and ready. I should've probably changed the key because it's a stretch for my limited range in G.
The blues box guitar, incidentally, is one that the Works (UK discounted book store) was selling a few Christmases ago, but it's not too bad given it has a built in pick up and you can mess with the sound once it's in the software (Mixcraft in my case).
That may be it for me song-wise although I have a much more ambitious one if I can nail the lyrics down in time. Meantime I may post an instrumental that folks can set their own lyrics to.
Cool Girl
I was young and dumb, and hoping for the best,
wearing my young heart upon my chest.
To nobody’s surprise except my own,
that was when you laid me open to the bone.
If I wore my heart upon my sleeve,
would you still be among the first to leave?
They say hell was freezing over on that day,
that’s why I found myself sliding in your way.
Couldn’t think there was a dumber thing to do,
than to go and spit it out that I love you.
If I wore my heart upon my sleeve,
would you still be among the first to leave?
Dumbest thing I did was fall in love
with the cool girl in the year above.
Time has passed, but feelings pass so slow,
for the awkward kid who’s from the year below.
If I wore my heart upon my sleeve,
would you still be among the first to leave?
Now you’re single with two kids and all alone,
and I’ve somehow still your number on my phone.
I’m not so young, but still as dumb as hell,
to think there’s half a chance this will end well;
to think there’s half a chance this will end well.
@porrectus Mar 2022
Really nice write, really nice story, heartbreaking but fantastic. Nice work on the backing rhythm and the guitar work lended itself to the story telling, well done.
@ayehahmur Feb 2022
Well that's a bittersweet wee tale, isn't it? The story reallt suits your style though. That's an excellent melody you've found for the vocal - I don't hear too much of a stretch on it, it sounds great.
And the box guitar is perfect for this. Would like to hear more of it!
@tseaver Feb 2022
Good write! The shift from past regret to current doubt in the final verse is a perfect twist. The slide is fun: I'd like to have heard it up a bit in the mix.
@panch Feb 2022
This has got a lovely laid back vibe, especially with that restrained slide solo. Your thoughtful lyrics fit perfectly.
A blues box guitar from the Works? I missed that, must have been hidden amongst the pencils and cheap art sets.