In collaboration.
What will it take to make you love me?
Can’t stand the feeling you’ll never care
Done all I can to be the one for you
But when I reach out you’re never there
Can’t tell you how much it hurts
I just don’t have the words
Too many times I’ve tried
Too many tears I’ve cried
You need to just walk away
Before I throw away my pride
And beg you to stay
To please just stay
There’s a limit to how much I’ll take
how many times I can feel the pain
Cos you don’t see my heart break inside
when you dream and don’t call out my name
Can’t tell you how much it hurts
I just don’t have the words
Too many times I’ve tried
Too many tears I’ve cried
You need to just walk away
Before I throw away my pride
And beg you to stay
To please just stay
There’s nothing left for me to do now
No cards to play, nothing more to say
Can’t be near you without what I need
And you just can’t love me the right way
Please just go
Please just leave
Let me just try
To start anew
You can’t be what I need
And I’m so lost in you
Can’t tell you how much it hurts
I just don’t have the words
Too many times I’ve tried
Too many tears I’ve cried
You need to just walk away
Before I throw away my pride
And beg you to stay
To please just stay
@coolparadiso Mar 2022
Yup needs a bit of emotional singing with a big build. Classic torch song with a very strong chorus!
@driftwood1 Mar 2022
That "too many times tried/tears cried" pairing works great. Opens the chorus with a strong bhook, especially if it gets matched with a big melody. Sad, heartfelt and direct. #tit4tat
@siebass Mar 2022
Really raw lyric here, deep hurt, pain and longing clearly expressed. Human hearts are such complex and illogical things. Nicely done on this lyric.
@nadine Mar 2022
Yes, this could work as a ballad or torch song. A very slow one like 70-80 BPM. And somehow I hear a female voice but please don't ask me why. Like the line "You need to just walk away, Before I throw away my pride" #tit4tat
@williamjames Mar 2022
Pretty heart wrenching stuff. The chorus is really great, the bridge juxtaposes the verses superbly. Would love to hear this put to music!
@writeandwrong Feb 2022
Tight write with lots of feels. Many will easily be empathetic to this. Smooth flow. Superb bridge. Love the lines "You can’t be what I need and I’m so lost in you." Perfection. Please let me know when the music is set. Would love to hear it :) #tit4tat5
@colgoo Feb 2022
Ohhh. This is a real tear-jerker.
@kenficara Feb 2022
So sad, but very beautiful in spots — “when you dream and don’t call out my name” is such a clear moment.
@kahlo2013 Feb 2022
Ahhh the heartfelt angst is so palpable in this well crafted lyric! Perfect torch song!
@coolparadiso Feb 2022
Nice lyric, im hearing a big powerful female voice but maybe thats just me. Nice song music jumps up to it!
@wolfkier Feb 2022
I'm hearing a soul early rnb thing here... smooth and groovy. I hope someone picks this up would work real well.
Lovely tight write with the full "unrequited love" flavor. Well done.