Sooo I made this one rough and simple because it's the lesser wrong. I can't do the drums dynamic enough nor the bass it needs. The more I would work on it the less energy it would have. So I did it the way I do rock song around a campfire. I think it almost work. Don't you ?
If anyone wants to give it a try or turn it into a colombian poro or a finish tango, I'll be super excited !
https://soundcloud.com/ambroise-1/le-petit-nuage?utm_source=clipboard&utm_medium=text&utm_campaign=social_sharing
— English traduction below —
La vue est fantastique surplombante écrasante
Vos voisins en effet sont des anges timides
Humblement délaissant toute l’exubérante
Beauté du ciel pour vous qui en êtes avides
Le service est parfait il vous faudra beaucoup
De mauvaise foi pour lui trouver un défaut
Je sais à qui parler, comment le dire et où
Pour vous trouver un trou dans ce douillet berceau
Allongez-vous, vous êtes ici presque chez vous
Savourez le moelleux de ce petit nuage
On est mieux là qu’en bas allons relaxez-vous
Et oubliez enfin vos petits dérapages
Pour les quelques babioles grèvant votre conscience
Je connais un docteur qui peut arranger ça
C’est en théologie qu’il exerce sa science
Il maquille les fautes pour en faire une aura
Entre nous c’est moins grave qu’on veut bien laisser croire :
C’est la technologie qui vous a permis tout
Moi-même à votre époque j’aurais eu des histoires
Les conditions sociales exigeaient ça de vous
Allongez-vous, vous êtes ici presque chez vous
Savourez le moelleux de ce petit nuage
On est mieux là qu’en bas et ça reste entre nous
Moi aussi j’ai failli y passer quelques âges
Pont
Mais bientôt auront lieu les élections célestes
J’espère avoir trouvé en vous de bon soutiens
Vous avez su sur Terre en quelques dits et gestes
Confondre l’opinion dans un beau baratin
J’ai pour le paradis un projet de rigueur
Un projet pragmatique. Il y eu récemment
Trop de mansuétude au jugement des coeurs
La plèbe envahira bientôt nos logements
Allongez-vous, vous êtes ici presque chez vous
Savourez le moelleux de ce petit nuage
Nous saurons bien fermer le portail après nous
Admettre au paradis plus d’exclusivité
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The view is fantastic, a bird's eye view, overwhelming
Your neighbors indeed are shy angels
Humbly leaving all the exuberant
Beauty of the sky for you who carve for it
The service is perfect, you will need a lot
Of bad faith to find a defect in it
I know who to talk to, how to say it and where
To make your home in this cozy cradle
Lie down, you're home, almost
Enjoy the softness of this little cloud
We're better off here than down there, let's relax
And finally forget your little slip-ups
For the few triflesthat burden your conscience
I know a doctor who can fix that
He practices in theology
He covers up the faults to draw you an aura
Between you and me it's not that bad:
Technology is to blame to have allowed you that
I myself in your times would have been tempted
The social conditions demanded it of you
Lie down, you are almost at home here
Enjoy the softness of this little cloud
We're better off here than down there and it's just between us
I almost spent a few years down there too
Bridge
But soon the celestial elections will take place
I hope to have found supporting constituents in you
Back on Earth in a few words and gestures
You confused the opinion quite eloquently
I have for the paradise a project of rigor
A pragmatic project. There has been recently
Too much leniency in the judgment of the hearts
Soon the plebs will invade our dwellings
Lie down, you are here almost at home
Enjoy the softness of this little cloud
We will manage to close the gate behind us
Indulge in paradise in more exclusivity
@intoyourlight Mar 2022
Lovely guitar strumming. Makes me dream of Paris, sitting at the riverbank of the Seine, looking into the sky like I did last summer. It‘s cliche - I know! But I can’t help it.
And can I just say that these lyrics are wonderful? Very interesting storytelling here!
@nancycunning Mar 2022
Comme c'est bien!
That's beautiful. The guitar is amazing. I like the whistling too.
Now I want to sing en Francais!
I love the way it's hard to tell if this is an angel in good-standing or one of the fallen ones who is explaining at all. Beautiful work.
@wolfkier Mar 2022
The lyric is so very interesting - celestial elections - I love it and the gentle cloud of indifference and fixes.I can almost feel, again relating to films, The Discreet Charm of the Bourgeoisie, kind of satirical irony here, which is, I think, very French.... Loving it.
The whistling solo wins the prize too!
Tit4tat2 ~ !
@coolparadiso Mar 2022
# Tit4tat. Oh lyrically epic again! Great depth and feel to this accentuated by your pronunciation. I could add all the things you mention in your notes but I'm not sure it would be better! Fine song.
@jtsteam Feb 2022
Sounds good to me this way! Love that rhythm. I can see lots of dancing around the campfire.
@metalfoot Feb 2022
This works great as it and would also work great filled out with a full band. Very impressed. And the clever lyrics!!!
@richaaaay Feb 2022
Guitar groove works for sure and so does your vocal delivery (wistling too).
@sailingmagpie Feb 2022
I think it sounds cool as an acoustic track but I can see what you mean about how a full rock band arrangement would lift it to the next level. I can imagine the whistle as a massive guitar solo.