Oh my poor, poor muse of a mother.
To me, writing a song is like figuring out a puzzle, and the fun of it is to fit a long story with lots of details and emotions into a small space with very specific parameters and allow the story to transform while hopefully still making sense :-) I am not sure if I succeeded here, but again, it was fun trying.
I'd like to develop the 2nd verse and bridge lyrics a bit.
I'd love to add bass and some sort of solo instrument.
Maybe one day. . .
Thanks so much for listening!
Details angel in a power suit
She spread herself so thin
Like melted margarine
Limping in just in time
To each nightly finish line
Some days she couldn’t get out of bed
Some days she saw in shades of black and red
Some days I knew she’d rather see me dead.
CHORUS
But love is in the details
let’s-make-a-deal, a sign-and-seal type fairy tale
life’s so easily derailed
Make a wish, eat it quick, don’t leave a trail.
Every fourth Saturday
Kitchen’s closed, kids stay away
She’s baking sweet ham and green beans
For those hungry and in need.
I had a roof over my head
I was warm and I was fed
Just starved for all the love
I saw her lend.
CHORUS
@serene123 Mar 2022
Love this chorus.. the lyrics and melody are so warm and delightful...
@mikeskliar Mar 2022
This is really wonderful- I love all those different 'voices' you use on this, the melodic, the more conversational, and the whole vocal phrasing is expertly done. What a provocative and interesting lyric- full of those casual details (no pun intended, well maybe a little) that really keep this engaging and fascinating all the way thru. This is really wonderful, and a keeper of a recording as well!
@greengrassgirl Mar 2022
Wow, what a great lyric turned into a great song! I love honesty in songs, and this message is REAL. I especially like the last two lines:
Just starved for all the love
I saw her lend.
I found your page because of your nice comment on My American Hero. Got me exploring, and I'm glad I landed here.
@chrisshepard Feb 2022
Had a second listen out on the deck. Still a favorite. Some kind of Juliana Hatfield vibe going on,...I love the mix on your voice.
@deathboy Feb 2022
Actually sorta brings a tear to the eye in terms of the lyrics, very much sounds like my upbringing with struggling parents and a house full of kids. All the love!
@deathboy Feb 2022
Fucking delightful :) Sounds like your mom is like my dad is to me ;) Your voice is the fucking best :) If you have any space for a collab, do give me a poke, I'd love to hear what could come out :)
@deena Feb 2022
Loving these great lyrics and rhythm guitar and great harmonies.
@chrisshepard Feb 2022
Love your voice and delivery...Nice little deceptively quiet song and I like your lyrics!
@nancycunning Feb 2022
This is a really interesting pairing with your other song The Kids.
I love the way the bouncy feel of the song helps reinforce my picture of a manic mother, who has some trouble getting out of bed, but once she does energizer bunnies her way through life and goodworks. Pay no attention to the woman behind the curtain.
But the singer can see both, what her mother struggles with and what she herself needs.
Interesting to think about that child working out the kind of mother she wants to be. Beautiful singing.
@kenficara Feb 2022
Big things happen in the details; you say a lot with very little. The groove is great too; especially the light touch on the drums.
(Also I think you left a stray line at the top of the lyrics.)
@coolparadiso Feb 2022
thats a pretty strong lyric slightly hidden but if any doubt those last 2 lines hammer it home! Interesting lyrical flow delivery its very good!
@abudabard12514 Feb 2022
I like how cigarettey this feels. It's got a really yummy "the van broke down on the side of the highway so bust out the guitars and wait for the tow truck" kinda groove.
Warm and fed. Real realness.
@crisp1 Feb 2022
The last two verses pack a punch! Caught me off guard because the music and vocals seem so light and bouncy, but maybe, upon closer inspection, there's actually an undertone of sadness in there. Very well done indeed!
@zecoop Feb 2022
Wow, this is wonderful. Very vintage sounding but at the same time very original. I love the balance between the verse and chorus and just wonderful lyrics throughout. I had to listen a second time!
@johnstaples Feb 2022
Hey Angelina, ya done real good! I love how this melody bounces merrily along even though the subject matter may not be so merry. I am delight with the chorus and how one line,
But love is in the details
is sung slow and sweet while the next line,
let’s-make-a-deal, a sign-and-seal type fairy tale
is sung very fast! This makes for a memorable and rewarding chorus!
Your lyrics really touched me too. My mom was not what you would call a loving person. That last verse, lines 1, 2, and 3 rang especially true for me.
Nice work on this! Love hearing your voice and new music!
@leavesong Feb 2022
"Starved for all the love I saw her lend." Ok, there's more complexity to process here. Great song.
@leavesong Feb 2022
You definitely succeeded. And your mother's love comes through in all its details. I love this song and will play it again and again. Cheers.