The skirmish prompt was ‘overcome myself’ . I started ( very unusually fir me) by looking at a thesaurus
Do you excel? Do you outdo ?
Do you glide to the top?
Do you surpass? Do you transcend
Are you the ‘best of the crop?’
Do you shine? Are you polished ?
Do you put others in the shade?
Do you outstrip? Are you an easy fit?
Are you above the grade ?
Are you victorious always a winner ?
Are you the star of the show?
Do the others emulate you
Want to go where you go?
Is there nothing worth the challenge
Is it all just things to do ?
Are you bored of the idolatry
Would you like a worthy goal to pursue ?
Do you feel like you are languishing?
It’s all too easy you yearn to strive ?
Never known the feel of anguishing
The need to fight to stay alive!
Are you nonchalant - a bit aloof
Found you can’t say much at all
You can’t admit to your successes
As that results in others feeling small.
You can do this and also that
and yes that other thing you mastered
But when you let on and admit it
They just think ‘ you cocky bastard!’
Is it all a lot too easy
not enough to keep you hooked
You stray and strain to stay on task
To stifle yawns conceal the look
Of boredom -what a chore
Only this to overcome
to be accepted as you are
And as you are to love someone
@robynmackenzie Feb 2022
Really interesting narrative presented through the repeated questions. I really like the last verse in particular, there's a sense of hopefulness there that's a nice finish to the song.
@gubna Feb 2022
I love the use of nonchalant and languishing. Years ago in one of the bands I was in, we had a song called Derelict and I think the chorus was mainly the word "languisher".
@coolparadiso Feb 2022
they are good lyrics and a skirmish as well! boredom is a shocking chore
@srcoops Feb 2022
Well written. Interesting and entertaining.
@seemanski Feb 2022
Interesting take on the challenge, not using the title but having it inspire your words was a interesting directions to take.
@musicsongwriter Feb 2022
Very imaginative lyrics and cool take on the prompt.
@johnstaples Feb 2022
Dang, you definitely put that thesaurus to good use! So many great lines in here! The speaker in this song seems to be a legend in their own mind! Enjoyed my read. Nice skirmishing!!
@keithcuts Feb 2022
mastered and bastard made me laugh. clever!
great rhymes an thought provoking lyrics here!
nicely done!
@ajna1960 Feb 2022
Oh my, so many words and lines and things to ponder !
I love the idea of being accepted for who you are. Very important :)
I love that last verse :)
@sheilerk Feb 2022
Wow! That's a lot to think about! That last verse really wraps it up and zeroes in on what's important. It all flows very well. There are so many great lines and rhymes, but the best thing is how many ideas you packed into this one lyric!