Feb 2022 break-up-song ukulele fuc electric-ukelele indie-folk singer-songwriter queer
I have had the chord cycle for the verses of this stuck in my head looking for a song to belong to for... a while. I visited my family's lake house over the weekend, and I found the setting inspired me.
With fire across the firmament,
The sunset cast aflame -
With waves lapping upon the shore,
Red with blood of the day -
We sat together upon the dock,
Avoiding each others’ gaze.
Her voice was quiet when she asked
If I would stay.
The world seemed wider
When we were young -
A vast & open space.
But time’s a river and not a lake -
Sadly, our view will change.
I kept my silence as night came down,
As stars emerged in its wake.
I felt our foundations trembling,
With tides shift and sway.
She touched my hand
And I grasped her back -
Unsure beneath the unwieldy weight
Of her mistake.
The world seemed wider
When we were young -
A vast & open space.
But time’s a river and not a lake -
Sadly, our view does change.
With the background groan
Of creaking wood,
And mooring rotting through,
If her breath seemed more a sob,
I was unknotting, too.
She may regret the harm she’d done -
She could not my heart unbruise.
The world seemed wider
When we were young -
A vast & open space.
But time’s a river and not a lake -
Sadly, we will change.
Out beyond us in the dark,
A night bird splashed for prey -
I knew my next words to eviscerate
Much the same way.
“I forgive you, oh, my love -
But we’ll never be the same.
For all remorse and desperate hope -
I cannot stay.”
The world seemed wider
When we were young -
A vast & open space.
But time’s a river and not a lake -
Sadly, we have changed.
@danvaillancourt Mar 2022
Lovely uke break-up song. I like the strong vibrato at the end of some of your words. Nice arrangement and harmonies. Nice!
@dzdandcunfsd Feb 2022
Another really lovely yearnful uke song. Outstanding vocal perfomance as well. Time's a river and not a lake is a awesome line!
This has a really cool vibe to it I can't quite put my finger on as well. It's like a folksy yet operatic sea shanty or something. I quite enjoyed this.
@colgoo Feb 2022
I love how the last line in the chorus about change changes each time. Also love the bass viol sound you’ve got in the bass line. Great story.
@evandiem Feb 2022
For some reason I feel like I don't often hear such tight vibrato in a lower range, something about it really fits the waltz. I also like that each verse ties together story progression and one big clear image. Well done!