Another tough one to get out, but there are lines and melodies I do like from this one (I might've gone overboard with the 'Ooo-ooo-Ooo-ooo's). It also started out as the One Note Melody challenge, and while it does deviate a bit in its final form, I belief I've retained its ghost. Hope you enjoy, and I'll keep plugging along on this musical rediscovery.
You know I don't know myself.
I say the words; you won't ever tell.
But you won't keep your mouth shut.
You saw how sorry I was.
When you came in saying,
'Babe, I'll make it right,'
did you know you'd make me
cry a thousand times?
You do you:
it's tried and true.
I'm black and blue,
but you do you.
I found my way on my own;
you didn't like all the truth I told,
and you didn't have to think twice:
you took me down with your knife.
You trade secrets, deadly,
devious lies.
You sell friends and foes as
parts for a good time.
You do you:
it's tried and true.
I'm black and blue,
but you do you.
I don't know why I'm your bullseye.
Haven't I wished you well?
You know I tried, but you chose to fight,
so you can die on this hill.
I've hidden fine in plain sight.
I know you hoped I would cut all ties
(I think they've got a right to know),
but there's no saying I won't.
When you set them on me
like a blood hound,
I hope you see how badly
you've turned out.
You do you:
it's tried and true.
I'm black and blue,
but you do you.
You do you:
it's tried and true
like deja vu,
but you do you.
@dock Feb 2022
Great lyrics, you really capture that space that women get put in by the men around them. Beautifully sung. And the punchy guitar helps hammer home the underlying resentment of the lyric.
@kenficara Feb 2022
Acousticy punkish feeling — also like the long vocal lines over the punchy guitar.
@sheslin Feb 2022
I am getting Nirvana vibes a bit on this one. I think you nailed this challenge. Love the narrow melody over that chord progression. Cool ending chord and note in your bridge! Your gorgeous voice floats beautifully above your rhythmic guitar. Great lyrics and you kept it tightly focused on the you do you theme. Also the sweet singing of the biting lyrics was a very effective contrast.
@carpeliam Feb 2022
Your voice carries this song beautifully! I love how you started with the challenge and let the song take you from there- any deviations that you made were definitely the right ones to make.