Skipped ahead a bit in the saga of the self loathing vampire, demo to come
Waxen fingers cut the deck
It's almost time
Hunger grows like path of the man
who mounts the steps
Her fists clenched, eyes shut tight
She pushes on one sharp tooth
As if by force of will she could make it untrue
Then plucks the top card and lays it down
A new future is coming into view
The mouldering curtains in this shut up room
that block the light
Won't stay in place much longer
Thanks to St. Valentine
And the card in the fingers
(Les Amoreaux, Les Amoreaux)
That are starting to shake
Says the one who comes
Brings a love
That will release her from this fate
St.Valentine St. Valentine
Come to me
St. Valentine St.Valentine
Come to me
@porrectus Feb 2022
Great little picture. Nice imagery. Well done.
@jwhanberry Feb 2022
Hard to say what happens but I'm hoping for some edgy music in the demo.
@kahlo2013 Feb 2022
I don’t know the story but am nevertheless enthralled by your wonderful lyric and the darkness within!
@thedutchwidows Feb 2022
Very nice - I'm hoping this will have gothic, Bauhaus tones to it when you record it! Nicely skirmished!
@zeekle1998 Feb 2022
Nice write. I like this sort of stuff. It has a good vs evil appeal to it but who is which?? Will check this out with the music when you post it. Something dark and mysterious??
@whispermouse Feb 2022
I've never read "The Bloody Chamber" but now I want to! Lovely image words: "waxen fingers," "mouldering curtains" and the like. Nice skirmish!
@berni1954 Feb 2022
Tangential take on the prompt, but an intriguing one. Hope to hear the demo soon.
@pattie Feb 2022
Wow nice take on the prompt! Great skirmish!
@musicsongwriter Feb 2022
Unexpected take on the prompt. Looking forward to hearing it.
@arthurrossi Feb 2022
This reads like a lovely poem and would provide lyrics to an awesome song... It could be taken in very different directions musically... Lovely idea!
@keithcuts Feb 2022
Oh interesting and different take on the prompt!
Way to go
The descriptive words take me there.
Even from the first line waxen fingers cut the deck
@johnstaples Feb 2022
Wow, these are very cool lyrics! Ominous and scary! Dascinating! Great work!
@andygriff Feb 2022
These lyrics are fantastic. What an imaginative take on the prompt.
@coolparadiso Feb 2022
wow thats pretty darned good lyric in that time. i really like the way it moves through and a perfect end