After about 6 months after "breaking up with me" (after he cheated), my ex texted me out of the blue. Starting his message with "I know I'm blocked". I thought he was blocked too! It begs the question... Why would he send an apology text if he thought I would never see it...? Sounds like a good song to me!
After almost 3 years I'd expect nothing less than a
Gentle let down, a heartfelt discussion
But you didn't wanna talk or tell me anything
After almost 3 years I'd expect nothing less than a
Smooth transition to friendship or more
And I feel that I left you life much longer ago
If our love meant nothing to you
The least you could do is tell me why
Then months later you decide to
Send me texts you think I'll never see
Tryna tell me some apology
Sayin' 'your heart was full of poison"
And 'you didn't wanna hurt me'
Sendin' texts after I thought you'd gone
After I worked through it and moved on
Sayin that 'I'm the one who hurt you'
Believe whatever you want
You're not my problem anymore
After only 6 months I am back on my feet and I
Can feel nothing when saying your name
My confidence in myself dug me out of a hole
After only 6 month I am back on my feet and my
Graduation is coming up fast
And I feel that my life is now brighter than before
If our love meant nothing to you
Then why did you come crawling back by
Sendin' texts you think I'll never see
Tryna tell me some apology
Sayin' 'your heart was full of poison"
And 'you didn't wanna hurt me'
Sendin' texts after I thought you'd gone
After I worked through it and moved on
Sayin that 'I'm the one who hurt you'
Believe whatever you want
You're not my problem anymore
@dabirks Feb 2022
Very clear on the timing, which can be difficult in songwriting.
I especially like the delivery change in the chorus and how you stop playing on the "You're not my problem anymore."
I'm wondering about having the melody go more minor during the verses to match the chords. May be something that adds more weight/angst.
You could skip singing the "by" after "crawling back" -- our brain will fill that in and it isn't needed to make the chorus make sense. Currently, it sounds like it is making it tricky to fit in.
I'd love to produce this with you!
@hoppiern Feb 2022
Yay for getting a good song out of a perplexing experience! This is a really solid pop song and I like the rhythmic variations between the verses, the pre-chorus and chorus. I like how you take the listener through the experience and quoting the texts is really effective. Nice piano and great vocals - keep writing!! The world needs more of you. :-)