Feb 2022 electric blues folk fingerstyle hybrid-guitar blues-rewrite
I had this idea floating around ("one foot on the platform, one foot on the train,") from my favorite verse of "House Of The Rising Sun," but it was seeing @pabrizzer 's "Dust My Broom" (https://fawm.org/songs/127626/) and @mikeskliar 's "Crossroads" (https://fawm.org/songs/130389/) that made me think this might be worth pursuing. In fact, I think it should be a thing, so I've tagged mine "blues-rewrite" and I'm hoping other people will too. "And then," to quote Arlo Guthrie, "they may think it's an organization."
More Hybrid guitar, hand-programmed Superior Drummer, hand percussion
One foot on the platform
One foot on the train
One foot on the platform, one foot on the train
Looking like a needle full of novocaine
One foot on the platform
One foot on the platform
One foot on the rail
One foot on the platform, one foot on the rail
Looking like a lesson in a long black veil
One foot on the platform
One foot on the platform
One foot almost free
One foot on the platform, one foot almost free
Looking like a tango with eternity
@audrey Mar 2022
Oh, I love that guitar. Wonderful laid-back and sinister blues. Such an effective lyric too. This simple melody, lyric and slow-tempo steady beat has such depth and a very cool groove. Your last two lines of lyric are priceless. Love this. Had to listen twice.
@ofishell Feb 2022
Oooh, that final chord. I really like the way you reach just down to the lowest end of your register on the first "platform" of each verse, with notes climbing as the lines progress. Such a good feel.
@danvaillancourt Feb 2022
Nice! Love the parts you are doing with bass/guitar with the hybrid! Nice work on the chord/lead while keeping the bass going. Hand percussion on the wide sides adds a nice touch. I like the long decay on the verb/delay for the vocals and some of the other stereo effects on the guitar too.
@fearlessflight2014 Feb 2022
The way this floats reminds of what I love about Mark Knopfler. Some of my favourite writers ‘steal’ lines and build a new creature from some old but classy bones. I love this.
@keithcuts Feb 2022
Line “needle full of nova Caine” — super creative metaphor
Lesson in a long black veil is also fire!
Great vocabulary and original writing. Dig it!!
@mikeb Feb 2022
Very cool take-off of a familiar phrase. Nice lad-back feel during this song.
I did something similar with 'Crossroads' several years ago.
@panch Feb 2022
Love the guitar tones and the echo. Superbly played and recorded. An excellent listen.
@bethdesombre Feb 2022
Love the sound of this (and the concept too -- the repetition and the Koan-like line in each verse). I especially like the last stanza, and "looking like a tango with eternity."
@dock Feb 2022
Better than dark chocolate! The sparse echoy sounds are so hypnotizing. Your lyric works magic as well! Fantastic guitar sounds!
@pabrizzer Feb 2022
deliciously dark - the sound and performance is BRILL
@richaaaay Feb 2022
Dig’n the sound you are getting out of that seven string guitar. Tasty tone to those bluesy embellishments. Straight forward lyrics well conveyed.
@fonte Feb 2022
Love the rootsy low fi retro sound ! Sounds genuinely like it’s from the 60s. Very cool.
@midwayfair Feb 2022
Cool sounding song. These sorts of things are definitely one of my favorite songwriting exercises, taking something old and figuring out what you can still do with it or manipulating it into something completely different like you did here.