Feb 2022
I sang random sounds and the first bit of melody sounded like 'Bernadette and peter' so I went with a story song.
Bernadette and Peter met in ninety three
Bernadette was only seventeen
Peter went to work instead of university
Bernadette had slightly bigger dreams
She said she didn’t want to be stuck here in this little town
She always felt she simply needed more
Didn’t want to settle for second best by settling down
Peter wanted to help her to explore
Peter said Oh Burnie I burn for you
And I’m yearning to be enough for you
Bernadette and Peter went and fell in love
Peter work and Bernie chased her dream
Bernadette graduated school and then went back again
Peter was replaced by a new machine
Bernadette worked harder than she had ever worked before
Peter simply couldn’t find work at all
Bernadette got a new career and it opened up her world
She thought Peter expected more from her but he said
Burnie I burn for you
And I’m yearning to be enough for you
Peter I feel the same
But I feel like you look at me with shame
I understand the shame I think you gave I gave it to myself
But Peter I think I need a change
@pippa Feb 2022
What the others said! The energy in the lyrics carries right along to the end. Good writing.
@bethdesombre Feb 2022
Love where you went with this -- and I'm amazed you got there from the sounds of the words at the beginning. I especially love the opening stanza. The assonance/rhymes in the chorus work well.
@tseaver Feb 2022
Nice write. The hump to crunchy chords inthe chorus is delightful. Deft sketch of both.