Feb 2022 acoustic acoustic-one-take getyourkicks skirmish superskirmish songskirmish s021122a
Classic skirmish, write write write, silly silly silly, go. This is what happens when the first run through is the recording, but hey.
Chain here: https://fawm.org/forums/topic/12650/
Prompt: From https://randomwordgenerator.com/paragraph.php write something in some way based upon the following:
I'm heading back to Colorado tomorrow after being down in Santa Barbara over the weekend for the festival there. I will be making October plans once there and will try to arrange so I'm back here for the birthday if possible. I'll let you know as soon as I know the doctor's appointment schedule and my flight plans.
California, Colorado
Catch a flight first thing tomorrow
Making plans already for
October in the West
This has gotta be the worst
Seminar I’ve ever heard
Like Tony Robbins vomiting on
All the other wannabes
Plus I cannot understate
The state of the cuisine
Dry rolls, weak coffee,
Cookies from a cart
If I had to bet, I’d bet
On Santa Barbara’s Walmart
But not to worry now
I’m educated in the ways
Of how to speak to strangers
When I should just run away
And I’m not sure that you understand
The food was really, really bad
Get some sushi in the airport
Prob’ly drop a C-note
Hope that I don’t share a row
With anyone from Reno
Nevada isn’t bad
If you like to look at scenery
But give me somewhere wetter,
You know I like my greenery
Rain never bothered much
Unless I’ve got the gout
I had a bout last December,
Really knocked me out
It was all I could do
To sit, flipping through the streaming
Do you know how many shows
They can deliver? It would be a dream
Come true, of course they’re all just terrible
Except that one, you know,
About the guy who had that thing
Where he shared a brain with Charo
I think it was the future,
Or maybe it’s the past
It looked just like the thirties
Everyone wore funky hats
Well I’m sure you’ve got to go
I nearly talked your bloody ear off
I don’t know how you find the time
To plan a trip to Europe
I’ll catch you on the way back
There’s so much left to talk
I’m so sorry that I missed you
Oh, it cut me off
@crisp1 Mar 2022
Makes me think of the Barenaked Ladies. Great rhyming with a ton of humorous lines and somehow you also managed to work in a strong melody. You're a wizard!
@eas3637 Feb 2022
Hilarious! So many great rhymes here - I laughed out loud at "Get some sushi in the airport/Prob’ly drop a C-note/Hope that I don’t share a row/With anyone from Reno" Anyone who has ever gone to a terrible conference feels your pain!
@airbagtester Feb 2022
LOL the only thing better would be a recording of this on voice mail :) Or an old school cassette answering machine, you know, analog style. Sounds warmer. Really good take for not having much time to practice squeezing all those words in!
@kadmad202 Feb 2022
Nailed it! As others have said, your rapid-fire delivery is enviable, I'd have gotten tripped up words ago : ) Clever take, and I actually listened to the song before reading the prompt, so the final Oh, it cut me off was a hilarious surprise. This kind of song, I think, is one of your main superpowers (oh yes, there are others...)
@nancyrost Feb 2022
I was already rolling with laughter by the Tony Robbins line. Your flow is very fun. Would love to see you perform this in person.
@cblack Feb 2022
Very impressive vocals. I can never articulate that well at high speed. It's definitely an enviable skill. :) Nice.
@gubna Feb 2022
that is impressive! Dig it!
@barbara Feb 2022
You are a well-oiled silly machine, sir! So many laughs, just tumbling out, somersaulting over each other, I could barely keep up! Breath control, impressive. Catchy change up and chance to (maybe) get some more air. Thrilling skirmish result!
@kahlo2013 Feb 2022
John, this is fabulous! I really the rapid paced vocal delivery and all of the great details that feel like trips I have been on. Creative, clever, and fun. Ending is perfect! Awesome skirmish!
@misterdemp Feb 2022
Great skirmish, this is a good feel and bunch of fun words and ideas pouring out!
@musicsongwriter Feb 2022
Very impressive take on the prompt. Fun to listen to. Your vocals and playing are superb.
@mardeycranbleson Feb 2022
Absolutely love it! Can't believe you came up with this volume of lyrics all coherent funny and interesting in this short time. Melody and performance is so great too. The section starting with sushi in the airport is utterly triumphant and gorgeous I replayed that a bunch of times already.
@gflatminor Feb 2022
Haha! That is awsome! But is there really a show about a guy who shared a brain with Charo? Brilliant either way.
@writeandwrong Feb 2022
Whoa!!! Superb work!! Talk about visuals....phew!!! My brain got left on the plane! lol "...This has gotta be the worst seminar I’ve ever heard, like Tony Robbins vomiting on all the other wannabes..." Wow!! I never expected anything like this to come out of that prompt. "Except that one, you know about the guy who had that thing where he shared a brain with Charo..." Beyond genius!! My jaw dropped at one other from this prompt but this one really, truly takes the cake!! Absolutely brilliant work in such a short amount of time with a challenging prompt! Kudos!!
@kenmattsson Feb 2022
This is amazing! Impressed that you could write that in a skirmish. The wordplay is off-the-charts good. So many good references and anytime you can mention Charo in lyrics is a winner.
Great performance too!
@wylddandelyon Feb 2022
I liked the last line. Good rhythm. Stream of consciousness travelogue -- oh, wait, you're leaving a message. And machines just don't care.
@erbaer Feb 2022
Wow! That's a lot going on. That was an amazingly orchestrated avalanche of words and images. Well done! Hard to isolate what I liked when I liked it all... especially the ending. Great skirmish!