Feb 2022 feb1112skirmishno1 s021122a songskirmish fuc guy-with-ukulele acoustic-one-take baritone-ukulele
Skirmish by @mardeycranbleson at Skirmish: https://fawm.org/forums/topic/12650/
"From https://randomwordgenerator.com/paragraph.php write something in some way based upon the following:
I'm heading back to Colorado tomorrow after being down in Santa Barbara over the weekend for the festival there. I will be making October plans once there and will try to arrange so I'm back here for the birthday if possible. I'll let you know as soon as I know the doctor's appointment schedule and my flight plans."
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I was more struck by the sense of someone not being at a festival and the idea of wishing someone was there that you wanted to reconnect with came to me and I ran with it.
It is only the second skirmish I've done this FAWM. I'm sort of happy with it and sort of feeling it needs a lot of work.
Where the Whole Should Have Been
V1
Hello [D] There
It’s [F#m] been such a long [A] time
It was [G] good to see you at the festival last [A] week
It’s been [D] years
Since the [F#m] gang got all together as [A] one
Too bad [G] Jamie couldn't [A] make it, but [G] plans got in the [A7] way
Chorus
There was a [D] hole where the [A] whole should have [D] been
I [G] ached when I [A] discovered it, [G] deeply in my [A] genes
To [G] want to have that [F#m] touch again and [G] recreate the [A] scene
And [G] to start again to[A]gether [D] clean
V2
Hello [D] Jamie
I have [F#m] thought long of [A] you
And was [G] hoping you would [A] be there with at [G] the stage with the [A] crew
I’ve thought a [D] lot
Of the [F#m] fun we had at the [A] fair
And the [G] chances that we [A] had and so [G] often [A7] shared
Chorus
Bridge
I [G] know we never stated it
But [F#m] we both felt it inside
That [A] special little something
I [F#m] tried to hard to hide
I [G] thought about this for so long
And [F#m] nothing could be more true
Through[G]out all the passing years
I’ve [A7] dreamt more and more of you
Chorus
@berni1954 Apr 2022
I used to be heavily involved in the East Anglian Fayres in the late 1970s and early 1980s. I often wonder what happened to many of the people who I grew to love back then. This truly evokes that feeling of togetherness and loss that arises from intense relationships that burnt bright and whose embers are never quite extinguished.
@fuzzy Feb 2022
Lovely uke playing for sure.
This is gorgeous.
Great emotional vocal delivery.
So nice.
@elesimo Feb 2022
This is so lovely and sweet... the "hole where the whole should have been" is lyrically beautiful, and beautifully sang. I love the story you built out of the paragraph, the "what if things had been different" feeling.
@analogj Feb 2022
Very pretty and sort of haunting, Ken.
Yeah, I like the hole where the whole should be. Clever and thoughtful.
@leslie333 Feb 2022
Love the 'hole where the whole should have been'. Such a yearning song. Very nice especially for a skirmish!
@liz561 Feb 2022
Great chorus. Really like the chords you used too. Nice play on whole and hole. Nice storytelling for a skirmish!
@jtsteam Feb 2022
Great storytelling here. It's so hard to "put the band back together" as it were.
@writeandwrong Feb 2022
Love the reminiscent storytelling, flows so nicely in your performance. Relatable to many, I believe. Fantastic work on a difficult skirmish!! So well done!
@eas3637 Feb 2022
You have spun a compelling story out of this prompt - great write! Your chord progression in this song is lovely and supports your melody well. Your bridge is especially strong - I love how the words scan so naturally: "I know we never stated it/But we both felt it inside/That special little something/I tried so hard to hide"
@mandolinda Feb 2022
Beautiful Ken. Very nice nostalgia and longing. A wow see skirmish lyric for sure.
@bethdesombre Feb 2022
This is a skirmish?! Wow! Doesn't feel like something written so quickly. So nicely conversational (in both lyric and melody). And the hole/whole combination is effective. (I also especially like the chorus melody, which makes a nice counterpoint to the verse melody).
@barbara Feb 2022
I like how convey this revelation of deeper feelings that evolves from a sense of something sorely missing. Sometimes feelings surprise us like that. The chorus really seems to be blooming toward the end! Lovely. I’m glad you trusted your instincts on the direction to take. Happy second skirmish! :)
@kahlo2013 Feb 2022
This is a wonderful heartfelt song. I really love the bridge and how personal and intimate the song feels from a prompt that did not feel personal at all. As always, your delivery is spectacular. Such great vocals!
@misterdemp Feb 2022
Cool way to connect this prompt to missing a friend on a trip. Great concept and idea.
@bradbrubaker Feb 2022
I had no idea how anyone would do this skirmish, but you managed to create something genuine. Kudos!
@mardeycranbleson Feb 2022
I like this! Really like your unadorned honest performance style. I like the way you play uke it sounds guitar-like and fuller than usual. Really like the beginning of each verse that melody part is pretty catchy.
@johncrossman Feb 2022
Ah, nice twist of phrase. I wasn't expecting things to pick up in the 2nd verse, nice change and, like the comment below, the tone changes to anticipation. It's an effective snapshot. I like the phrase "recreate the scene" in particular in this setting, which feels right when talking about a fair/festival. Nice work!
@cindyrella Feb 2022
I really enjoyed this one! Love the title and a truly good song!
@gflatminor Feb 2022
I love that "There's a whole where the whole should have been". Such a complete song in an hour! Great job.
@musicsongwriter Feb 2022
Lovely song. I like the contrasts between the relaxing start and more active development showing excitement. Very nice to listen to.