Feb 2022 feb1112skirmishno1 s021122a acoustic-one-take chickens
Skirmish: https://fawm.org/forums/topic/12650/
I picked the theme "flight plans" from the paragraph. This song is from the perspective of my hens who are tired of being treated aggressively by the roosters.
I ran out of time before I really pinned down some parts of the melody, so it's pretty shaky in spots, but that's show-biz, baby!
What do I need you for?
You're always on my ass.
It's not a metaphor.
You constantly harass.
Give me a reason why I should stay.
Mark my words and hear what I say.
One of these days I'll fly away.
One of these days I'll fly away.
A bunch of lunatics
is what we think you are.
The things we put up with
can only go so far.
And soon we're gonna hit the highway.
Mark my words and hear what I say.
One of these days I'll fly away.
One of these days I'll fly away.
One day when the coast is clear
we'll hop and flap right out of here,
and if you doubt that we're sincere
just try our patience.
Try our patience.
Try our patience.
Please.
What do I need you for?
You're always on my ass.
It's not a metaphor.
You constantly harass.
Give me a reason why I should stay.
Mark my words and hear what I say.
One of these days I'll fly away.
One of these days I'll fly away.
One of these days I'll fly away.
@richaaaay Mar 2022
Kinda a defiant tune but presented in a fun way. Great performance and impressive skirmish.
@whispermouse Feb 2022
Chicken themed or not, the sentiment is universal. Nice chorus here, I always like the incorporation of phrases like "mark my words."
@winchperry Feb 2022
I just exclaimed outloud, "This is awesome!" The subtlety of the lyric (would never guess it was about chickens if you didn't say) is genius and the energy of the chords, melody and rhyme scene really got me going! Love it!
@kahlo2013 Feb 2022
Oh this is so wonderfully pointed! Started off strong and gets better as it goes on.
@barbara Feb 2022
I love it!! A great meter to the delivery and a really creative perspective to take. Really, roosters?! Back the hell off! :)
@misterdemp Feb 2022
Great work on this song! Great groove and feel!
@mardeycranbleson Feb 2022
Great theme pulled from the paragraph! Don't hear much shakiness in the melody. Chorus ("one of these days") is great very anthemic! Nice bridge too (I think it was a bridge).
@johncrossman Feb 2022
Pretty catchy. Hop and flap, ha! Yeah, like someone said the guitar keeps propelling it forward, which is good for a movement song. Very complete scene you've set here!
@gflatminor Feb 2022
Wow! Great job in an hour. Excellent take on the prompt. You really get a lot out of that solo guitar too. It's so propulsive the strumming pattern and the walk-down. I love the all-in singing too.
@erbaer Feb 2022
Oh chickens! They tell stories, don't they. Great rousing song. Excellent skirmishing!
@kenmattsson Feb 2022
It feels like an "I've been done wrong" song by anyone, and there's an openness to it. Your performance is solid, and I'm sure that you can nail down those parts you think need to be tuned up. Nice skirmish.
@writeandwrong Feb 2022
My jaw dropped the whole way through! Genius take on the prompt!! The visuals made me smile like "hop and flap." Sweet hook and performance!
@musicsongwriter Feb 2022
Fun song to listen to, not fun to be in a relationship like this. Cool singing and playing.