I like the way this sounds. Given some time, I would loop it around, losing myself in the groove, adding some lyrics, keys, my best Bowie impersonation, whatever. Feel free to pull it into your DAW and add all that stuff. I definitely want to get that "pantheon of no shit Sherlock" in there. In my view, that's the linchpin of the lyric.
(This is another one that's more a mood than a song. I don't play with electric guitars much, so it took me a long time just to get some tone I liked.)
Do people die in Paris?
Are they late for work?
Do they walk by the cathedrals without ever once looking up?
I’ve enlarged for texture
What’s writ large in the sky
The uncomfortable truth
I’ve been trying to hide
Yes people die in Paris
Of course they’re late for work
In the pantheon of no shit Sherlock I chisel out this verse
I enlarge for texture
What’s writ large in the sky
The uncomfortable truth
We’ve been trying to hide
@lcad Feb 2022
Great lyric and a really groovy short song, there's definitely more here to build from. I like the pantheon of no shit theme but the first verse is really strong as a motif and you could easily play off that idea to other cities, stupid questions, to build more verses. Then close with the no shit at the end. Sounds great though, your voice reminds me of Al Stewart.
@coolparadiso Feb 2022
that is a very cool lyric - excellent title and it does have a pretty sound! plenty to work with there
@ttg105 Feb 2022
Intriguing lyrics and cool drum track. I like the way you answer your first-verse questions in the second verse. What happened to the second verse, by the way? I don't hear it. Love "In the pantheon of no shit Sherlock."
@jayjay Feb 2022
Always interesting thought provoking lyrics from you @rayboneor . Felt a bit petshop boysy to me Hanging on for the rest now. It was great.
@lifewithtomcat Feb 2022
Super solid start - love mind play like this
@vomvorton Feb 2022
I also like the way this sounds! Nice work finding a really lush guitar tone, and that beat is really cool. Intriguing lyric snippet, I would definitely not complain if this becomes one of those songs you rework and re-post and revise!
@cowboydick Feb 2022
Very neat. The guitar reminds me a bit of Johnny Marr's texture in some of the Smiths' songs. Great title ... I appreciate the sadness of the line about walking past cathedrals and never looking up.
@balancelost Feb 2022
You should save these guitar settings cos they sound lush! I love that idea in the lyric of what most would consider amazing is considered boring by the people who see it every day. And to answer all you questions, yes.
@owl Feb 2022
Love these lyrics—the idea of the main hook/title is a great metaphor, and I really like the sense of the ordinary everywhere that you’ve conveyed with the Paris lines. The atmosphere is lovely, the combo of the synthetic drums with the softly strummed guitar really works.
@standup Feb 2022
Nice mood, I like laid-back percussion.
Enlarged for texture — the uncomfortable truth. I like that line / concept.