Feb 2022 ccwelcome lyrics-only needs-music self-love depression-songs
unfortunately my computers busted so i cant really do anything with this. but i like the lyrics and the sentiment so i thought id share.
i might get around to recording this when it's working again (should be soon) but i might not.
if anyone wants to in the meantime, feel free!
adrift upon the oceans, my emotions
in shambles, lying facedown on the floor
beneath the imperfections, ressurection
in life as death, in death, forevermore
at peace with my existence, my insistence
im failing, sum the parts until theyre whole
the emptyness inside me, is subsiding
in heart as mind, in mind, without control
and im losing my mind
but im am not losing hope
im stumbling blindly to the future
i dont wanna die
but i dont know how to cope
im alive, at least for now
and that what counts
thunderous, immense
miniscule, irrelevant
my imaginations hellbent
on raising hell inside my head
until the pressure builds
and i fucking explode
lost among the spaces, im erasing
everything, that hurts me in my soul
living with the feeling, im still healing
in life as death,
in heart as mind,
in bo, dy, as, in, soul
and im losing my mind
but im am not losing hope
im stumbling blindly to the future
i dont wanna die
but i dont know how to cope
im alive, at least for now
and that what counts
im alive, at least for now,
and thats what counts
@infilktion Feb 2022
Wow. Think it's great just as poetry. I find the second verse particularly complex and complelling.
at peace with my existence, my insistence
im failing, sum the parts until theyre whole
the emptyness inside me, is subsiding
in heart as mind, in mind, without control
@jsmalls Feb 2022
"my imaginations hellbent
on raising hell inside my head"
Your writing has a bluntness to it that forces the reader/listener (imo) to ask themselves if they've experiences things similar to what you're writing about. I know when I read the above lines, a voice in my head said "THAT'S YOU" to myself and I had to remember that I was reading someone else's words. Being both straightforward and (for lack of a better term) "relatable" can be hard to do at the same time and I think you've done so here with your lyrical content!
@coolparadiso Feb 2022
Nice! I like those internal rhymes in amongst more freeform writing! Some cool lines especially “, and im losing my mind
but im am not losing hope” etc.