i saw you dancing on the platform
the station staff were going spare
i saw you dancing on the platform
like you didn't care
some yelled look she's naked
that made everyone stop and stare
yes you were dancing naked
but you really didn't care
the police came to arrest you
it's illegal to dance bare
the police came to arrest you
they won't have naked dancing there
@berni1954 Feb 2022
As others have said, you are the master of saying so much in so few lines. But you know I think that and have done for years from your work on the Seasons.
A performing arts group in Liverpool once had a couple in knitted skin coloured wool suits that included genitalia dancing down one of the city's main pedestrian thoroughfares. They were arrested and charged with obscenity... at a time when Thatcher was agreeing to the true obscenity of the siting of Cruise Missiles across Britain.
@andygriff Feb 2022
A beautifully painted scene in twelve lines. If you can say it so well in a short time why take longer? Enjoyed this :)
@coolparadiso Feb 2022
you were always going to make it in this challenge! really nice melody here. you say so much in so few lyrics here! its a whole story we can fill in the gaps
@kahlo2013 Feb 2022
a pity that there was no naked dancing thereā¦ great strum pattern and delivery of these unique slice of quirky life lyrics
@jwhanberry Feb 2022
Great twisted take on the prompt. And well performed to boot! Great skirmish.
@misterdemp Feb 2022
Way to set up a fun and silly scene. Reminds me of the characters and experiences daily in my NYC days.
@mikeskliar Feb 2022
nicely done! really self-contained, great tune, great story, and short and sweet!
@jtsteam Feb 2022
If this happened at my local station there'd be no station staff to be interested most of the time... also they'd freeze to death. Quite a picture you've painted here! Good stuff!