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Looking to Board This Train
For Skirmish posted by @cairobraga
Train Station SO21022
I'm imagining a bluesy gospelly feel to this one.
If you'd like to build something for it, have at it. Feel free to change anything that you like...
Looking to Board This Train
This platform is unheard of
It's hot, it's gonna rain
This platform is unheard of
I need to board this train
Quit standing in the door
Quit blocking up my way
You are not the only one
what needs to ride today
This platform is unheard of
It's hot, it's gonna rain
This platform is unheard of
I need to board this train
Plenty of room in the middle
Go on, step inside
Make a little room right now
So other folks can ride
This platform is unheard of
It's hot and gonna rain
This platform is unheard of
I need to board this train
Finally found a place to stand
Let's head on down the tracks
What's all that commotion
Quit yelling at my back
This platform is unheard of
It's hot and gonna rain
This platform is unheard of
I need to board this train
This platform is unheard of
Can't you see
I need to board this train
Oh, I need to board this train
Oh, I need to board this train
I need to board this train
Oh, I need to board this train
Oh, I need to board this train
We all need to board this train
We all need
We all need to board this train
@themelgoexperience Feb 2022
Nancy I'm gonna take a crack at this one!
@nancycunning Feb 2022
@tedseaver I'd love to hear your version of this one. Feel free to change anything you need to.
"outrageous" might sing better than "unheard of" and still have a double meaning....though anything you like is good.
@tseaver Feb 2022
@nancycunning I'd like to take a crack at a Piedmont-ish / fingerstyle version. Like @mikeskliar, the "unheard of" phrase makes my tongue stumble, so I'll likely tweak the chorus.
@carleybaer Feb 2022
I love traveling by train but yeah, sometimes it goes like this. I can definitely hear this as a blues.
@mikeskliar Feb 2022
nice write, i can hear the gospel influence. 'unheard of' feels a little awkward tho? maybe play around with that phrase?
@misterdemp Feb 2022
Reminds me of those crowded commutes in summer months in my time in bigger cities.
@jwhanberry Feb 2022
The perils of pushy passengers in the station and on the train. It's like, hey, relax, we're all gonna get on and get gone. You painted the scene very well.
@porrectus Feb 2022
Way to paint a picture, I could feel it. Nice write.
@devslev Feb 2022
As someone who has been often packed into a train and also have not been able to board a full train, this resonates
@clioem Feb 2022
I'm really hearing the blues for this one! Really like the vibe here!
@roddy Feb 2022
Great lyrics. They read well and they have the rhythm of train tracks I like the 'we all need to board this train' line.
@jtsteam Feb 2022
I can imagine this building to quite a crescendo. It does seem like a gospel sound with a big voice would fit really well. Good stuff!
@keithcuts Feb 2022
cool writing
visuals bring it all home
choo choo
nicely done on the skirmish
@ajna1960 Feb 2022
I can certainly hear the gospel rhythm and energy in this lyric.
I think these are my fav 2 lines:
"What's all that commotion
Quit yelling at my back"