A little late, but I quickly wrote this
Take Away
© 2022 Cindy Prince
I went through the drive-thru
Ordered a shake
When you handed it to me
I began to quake
The intense way you looked at me
That I knew wasn't fake
That was my take away
I wasn't very hungry
But I went right back through
I just had to have
Another close look at you
The second time better
Girl, what will I do?
That was my take away
Chorus
My take away
Took my breath away
Don't think I'll ever be the same
My take away
Was more than okay
And I don't even know your name
Two more times through
I got up my nerve
I wasn't even aware
Of any food that you served
I asked you out
Will you be my hors d'oeuvre
That was my take away
Repeat chorus
@liz561 Mar 2022
I love "will you be my hors d'oeuvre"! It really captured how people have a chance meeting and just know that's their person. Great take on the prompt!
@prsongsmith Feb 2022
Spectacular!! Love how you told a whole story in three verses and a chorus. And nice job seamlessly incorporating two meanings for one prompt!
@tunecat Feb 2022
Update - Cambridge dictionary says ‘mainly US’ https://dictionary.cambridge.org/dictionary/english/takeaway.
@tunecat Feb 2022
Thanks for the chuckle. This mornings got a lot better already. I love wot. I like’ my take away was more than ok’ simple bit effective! Somehow I got a touch of frank zappa- thinking of how his superbly clber songs also had huge amounts of tongue in cheek comedic elements. Great write. Gif the record over here across the pond the second use of the expression is actually new to me ( well it was until I came across it in another of these skirmish songs). I’m commenting out of interest - I teach English - as a foreign language- so I’m into languAge snd spot these things!!
@whispermouse Feb 2022
Nice job incorporating various meanings of "take away" - solid skirmish!
@jwhanberry Feb 2022
Sweet story. I'm sure it happens that way somewhere on a daily basis. Good quick skirmish write.
@berni1954 Feb 2022
Great little narrative song evolving its story through visits to the take out counter :-). Fun and a clever approach to the prompt. Didn't expect a love song from this prompt. Well done ma'am.
@porrectus Feb 2022
Nice flow great take on the theme. Good skirmish
@vegansongs Feb 2022
Now I'm hungry!! Great skirmishing!
@thedutchwidows Feb 2022
Excellent. Really captures the uncertainty of those moments, on the verge of something... Very nice!
@kenmattsson Feb 2022
Lovely write! I am immediately drawn into the story, and the repeating lines work. Nice job Cindy!
@hmstreetteam Feb 2022
That is a brilliant switch, a heart-in-the-throat moment at the end of the first verse. The rest of the song builds from there. Clever construction and a nice write!
@misterdemp Feb 2022
Will you be my hors d'oeuvre! That's a really fun and unexpected line and rhyme. Cool scene and ideas!