Feb 2022
Ok. Here we go. Joined 3 days ago. Gonna try to catch up. I knew FAWM would get me to go back to some old unfinished songs and finish them as well as write new ones - boom. Thanks FAWM.
With this one, I started by just putting pencil to paper, wrote the first line and let that take me. It either is too sappy or hopefully hits the spot.
Can You Come Out And Play
Can you come out and play
I’ve got a ball
And it’s a beautiful day
We’ll throw it back and forth
And back and forth
To each other
We’ll smile and be glad
That we’re here with one another
Be my friend forever
I always want to be together
Love is stronger than this world
Our love is stronger than this world
I’ve got a bottle of wine
And two glasses
Do you have a little time
We’ll drink and we’ll laugh
On this beautiful day
There’s so much on my mind
That I really want to say
Be my friend forever
I always want to be together
Love is stronger than this world
Our love is stronger than this world
Catch my ball
Drink my wine
When we’re lost
We will find each other
When we struggle
We’ll remind one another
That love is stronger than this world
Our love is stronger than this world
Can you come out and play
I’ve got a ball
And it’s a beautiful day
@abudabard12514 Feb 2022
Don't take me the wrong way cause I think you did a really good job with this tune, but I feel like this could be a brilliant song for a villainous character. Like someone predatorily watching someone from afar, Phantom of the Opera style.
Or maybe even the person they're singing about is no longer in this mortal coil and they're looking at an old picture of them or something as the song plays. I feel like the way the music sits with the lyrics has a really nice way of asking you not to take it at face value. Though it's also lovely at face value. Nice work
@bractune Feb 2022
Wow, this song moves me so much. Great lyric and melodies, but I think what pushes it over the top for me are the dramatic pauses in the chorus, right in the middle of the lines. So much emotion in those pauses. Such a good vocal delivery in the whole tune. Awesome job,
@kenmattsson Feb 2022
Nice singing, and I love the little bell parts of the arrangement. I like the imagery of playing ball and being an adult. Nice write.