I am wondering if 'human beings' sounds odd to sing. Maybe there is a better term: human species, human race, humankind...? Happy to hear thoughts. Thanks
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Last of the Human Beings
We said goodbye to our beautiful Earth
As we hurdled through the stars
We cried as we watched it explode
On our one-way trip to Mars
Chorus
We’re the last of the human beings
Are we lucky, we don’t know
We have nine months to figure it out
And millions of miles to go
For the first month the going is easy
We’re just trying to get along
There’s no talk of the faults and failing
And what we as humans did wrong
Chorus
We’re the last of the human beings
Are we lucky, we don’t know
We have eight months to figure it out
And millions of miles to go
Weeks feel like years cabin fever sets in
We’re contained in an endless fight
Division evolves as we all take sides
Each believing their own side is right
Chorus
We’re the last of the human beings
Are we lucky, we don’t know
We have two months to figure it out
And millions of miles to go
The spacecraft touches down upon Mars
There will be no new life to begin
We had the chance to change our course
But instead, we did ourselves in
Outro
We were the last of the human being
That’s how our story goes
We were the last of the human beings
We were lucky but we didn’t know
@wylddandelyon Mar 2022
Oh, so sad. I so very much wanted to see the last human beings find a way to reinvent themselves and survive.
The story is well-told, even if it didn't turn out the way I wanted. These are strong lyrics. Human beings, human race, humankind, I have no objection to any of them but perhaps with a tune, one would sound superior to the others.
#tit4tat
@humantornado Feb 2022
As a dude who samples Ray Bradbury a whole lot, this one gives me strong Martian Chronicles vibes. The imagery reminds me of a lot of that series of stories, and especially the story "The Other Foot", which is almost the same kind of story, the last of humanity fleeing to mars but with a bit of a twist. #tit4tat
@coolparadiso Feb 2022
yup sounds far to real for my liking! well said cleverly laid out with that slap at the end
@cindyrella Feb 2022
This hurts my heart, it simply so real! Beautifully written on a tough subject!
@colgoo Feb 2022
Ooof! Great storytelling. But, OUCH. We couldn’t make it nine months?
@greengrassgirl Feb 2022
Andrea, you come up with very imaginative story ideas, very versatile! You asked about "human beings." I guess I'd try to make "humans" work. I especially love the last line.
@shallowcarrot Feb 2022
Great subject for a song. And although it might be fairly common, I love how you've indicated the passage of time, and with it the increasing sense of urgency. Love it :)
@sunfire Feb 2022
I like this a lot. I think the ending fits as I've always thought and said, we need to clean up our own kitchen first, before making a mess in someone else's. Humans without the beings works too, I think. Beings is fine but eliminating it reduces the human ego a bit and maybe that would be more fitting since "beings'" confjures up someone or something more advanced in my mind. Anyway, loved the writing.
@richaaaay Feb 2022
Nicely written. A little depressing and too believable...So sad to say! This has a really easy feeling flow to it.
@oswlek Feb 2022
Dark. The last verse hit hard, and feels especially alarming given the current social climate. I'll see if I can come up with anything, but don't hold up any potential collabs on my account. :-)
@metalfoot Feb 2022
sorry for the doublepost!
@metalfoot Feb 2022
Human beings works; it may feel a little clunky written out but sung it should work.
I have some outstanding commitments yet to do but with your kind indulgence I might be willing to give this one a swing?