My submission for the Body Part challenge! I'm working on writing new drum parts, I got an mpd218 a few months back and I'm trying to get the hang of it.
I had three wishes
But see, I’m a little superstitious
Should I go for romance or for riches
I’m afraid to get it wrong
So I just pondered
I sat down and I just squandered
I don’t make wishes any longer
And now the genie is gone
I’m not a fool of desperation
I’m just a desperate fool
Seeking higher station
My hands are open, and my heart…
I’ve been thinking
While I’ve been sleeping
With my eyes wide open
I remember I used to dream
Of all those tomorrows
Deep joys and painful sorrows
But when I wake, my tomorrows
Have drifted into yesterday
There’s still a whisper in my soul
There’s still a light on somewhere
Somewhere down far below
I can feel it searching, reaching out, I can hear it calling
Please heart, please lungs
Please keep me alive
For another day longer
Not ready to die
I’ve got one more match
For a fire inside
Please heart, please lungs
Please help me survive
Please heart, please lungs
I’m not ready to go
I’ve got blood and breath
I’ve got something to show
And for all of those doubters
That don’t already know
Please heart, please lungs
I’ve got somewhere to go
@littlespiral Feb 2022
Wow. This is exceptional. Your lyrical rhythm and rhyming scheme are awesome, and I love the concept of the lyrics. I'm giving you a follow!
@cblack Feb 2022
Sounds great! A great example of its style. I could see this on an album for sure. Possibly even as a live highlight. Nice work!
@unpronounceable Feb 2022
I really like this drumbeat and your progression of adding in other instruments. The bright higher pitched synth (?) is a lovely and well-executed harmony. I find myself wishing this song was longer. What this song says feels so relatable and important.
@emory Feb 2022
The drum progression is a lot of fun... and your vocals have a lovely rhythm as well!
@richaaaay Feb 2022
I like how the drums set the tone right from the beginning. This just feels right: the lyrics, vocal delivery, piano, bass. Nicely done.