I didn't love the melody or chord progression that I came up with (so basically the whole song) initially, but after adding in vocal harmonies, I think it kinda works. I originally wanted an instrumental intro, but after laying out song sections in my DAW, I forgot to include an intro, so the demo just abruptly starts with the verse.
Edit: some notes on changes I’ll make post-FAWM. I’ll adjust the timing on some vocals where I came in early or late. I’ll try to improve the double guitar solo, using some of the ideas that came out well in the demo. There’s a few licks that I don’t love, but I do want to keep the same feel. I want some kind of brief intro. I want to try a modified melody on the opening lines of each verse. I think the current one highlights the modulation in the chord progression too much for my ears. Reprogram drums for cooler and less cheesy fills.
We all have the same
Memories that we can’t see
Scattered in our brains
Broken peace history
We try live in now
Sometimes we don’t know how
To escape it resonates
Separate and compensate
Is it safe? Is it safe?
Is it safe? Is it safe?
Betrayal of our heads
On fire all liars
Cycles of regrets
Entirely rewired
Experiences hurt
Rain clouds thunder bursts
We were born here first
We’ll all get what we deserve
We can never trust our eyes
Desperate to rely
On our minds to assign
Meaning to the dreary winter sky
Is it safe? Is it safe?
Is it safe? Is it safe?
Betrayal of our heads
On fire all liars
Cycles of regrets
Entirely rewired
Is it safe? It safe?
Betrayal of our heads
On fire all liars
Cycles of regrets
Entirely rewired
We remember what they said
We’re so tired of the old choir
Forced to disconnect
@wolfkier Mar 2022
Loving the way the guitars crank away L/R (including the 2fer1 solo) and the space you've made for the vocal. The lyrics are cool too, they're short, punchy evocative. On fire all liars is a line for the ages. Well done.
#tit4tat
@outinpublicdrummer Mar 2022
Echoing what @tuesdaygray and @burrsettles said- the guitar tone is awesome! This sounded really different from the first track while still retaining a distinct style and performance. Nice job!
@burrsettles Feb 2022
sounds great! definitely nailed that late 80s / early 90s college radio vibes a la teenage fanclub(?) with these hooks and harmonies (both vocal and guitars!). good demo to capture the spirit of this one!
@tuesdaygray Feb 2022
Absolutely love the guitar in this, the background riffs are really cool and it has an epic guitar solo! Really great lyrics and I love your choice of harmonies