First ever skirmish....a little dark. Great fun.
This one's about one of those relationships you get into and wish you saw the red flags way sooner..... It's all good, she gets out
Verse 1
You called me pretty
"Unlike any other"
I almost believed you
Turned into a lover
With a kiss and a wink
I'd melt in the middle
It didn't take much
Like a school girl I'd giggle
Chorus
"You're pretty pretty
Can I take you home?
Come with me oh darlin"
If only I'd known
"You're pretty pretty"
Stay with me tonight"
You'd promise over
"It'll all be alright"
Verse 2
It's too late now
I'm under control
Can't see any end
To this black hole
Searching for angels
Whilst fighting your demons
I lie awake
Just thinking of reasons
Verse 3
It's come to an end now
And I'm getting stronger
Watch how I leave
With all might I can conjure
You stole a smile
But not the last laugh
With the strength of a lion
I'll walk this path
@cicpisces Feb 2022
Nice storytelling with these lyrics. I like the contrast of being lovestruck by something not good for you. Like the gentle vocal. Nice work.
@apolez3 Feb 2022
Lovely Job, all seems to come together :
"You stole a smile
But not the last laugh
With the strength of a lion
I'll walk this path"
that is my favorite bit of lyrics/
@nick120968 Feb 2022
Really nice Carly, your voice is soooooooooooo good! Great stuff, love it!
@tukayandryan Feb 2022
Ooh those intro chords are lush. Melody is lovely and your vocal is lush again. Brilliant skirmish :)
@sheilerk Feb 2022
I love strong woman songs, and this definitely fits that description. We can all be taken in, but it's what we do once we've seen the light that's the real test. I really like this!! And, the melody works so very well.
@andygriff Feb 2022
Well this certainly works. Loving the chromatic descending sequence, fits the lyric.
@zeekle1998 Feb 2022
@songsfromcarly wow, music really brings these lyrics to life. Superb.
@writeandwrong Feb 2022
Oh, I love this even more now! Beautifully performed!!! Excellent melody and vocals!
@chrishinch86 Feb 2022
Love it, the lyrics and chords work so well together… the storytelling behind it really pulls you in. “You’re pretty pretty” is a great hook too. Well done!
@mariekevinkmusic Feb 2022
Love the music. The descending cadence in the verses makes it feel really ominous. Very appropriate for the lyrics. The chords add extra tension as well.
@ajna1960 Feb 2022
Interesting lyric and a good take on the 'pretty' prompt.
The chorus is catchy and pretty strong, especially that "You're pretty pretty" hook line.
@andygriff Feb 2022
Especially like verse three, you don't get many opportunities to stick 'conga' in a rhyme! Look forward to hearing the tune.
@writeandwrong Feb 2022
Ha! Love how this turned out! Definitely relatable and has a great flow to it. I was singing it as I was reading it. Nice rhyming conger with stronger!
@thedutchwidows Feb 2022
That's a great lyric - a great documenting of a journey, that works lyrically. Very nicely done!
@pearlmanhattan Feb 2022
great lyrics that move through the progression of a relationship! great imagery! Good Skirmish!
@metalfoot Feb 2022
Wow, that did go dark. I am glad the narrator gets out!
@tcelliott Feb 2022
Ooh, i wasn't expecting this story arc from the first verse. I like the empowering feel of the last bit, almost a redemption: finding strength. Good take on the prompt.
@songsfromcarly Feb 2022
@zeekle1998 ooo thanks, is this an earlier challenge ?
@zeekle1998 Feb 2022
@songsfromcarly nicely done. And you used ‘conger’!! Extra points.
@mariekevinkmusic Feb 2022
Great 3rd verse. Seems quite a few songs this skirmish have uplifting or slightly unexpected twists at the end :-)
@songsfromcarly Feb 2022
@zeekle1998 @hmstreetteam third verse
@whispermouse Feb 2022
"Searching for angels / Whilst fighting your demons" nice lines! I'm into the dark feel.
@zeekle1998 Feb 2022
I’m with @hmstreetteam it’s like you’ve left us on a cliffhanger. This has a real darkness to it. I look forward to hearing it with music, and perhaps a happier third verse.
@mikeskliar Feb 2022
powerful lyric there! well done!
@songsfromcarly Feb 2022
@hmstreetteam you've given me an idea for a third verse! Thank you!
@hmstreetteam Feb 2022
And here I was hoping for a happier ending! But that just shows that it’s a compelling story with its two scenes. And there is a moral, about not putting too much stock in what people say. Nicely written!