The writing prompt was pretty. This was a first-take recording, a rarity for me. Listening to the playback, I think I hear a Neil Young influence at work.
I made a mess out of all of my connections
No one wants to see me anymore
I don’t even dare ask for directions
People see my face and close the door
It must look like a scandal
More than I can handle
But soon soon pretty soon
I’ll be making it pretty
Soon soon pretty soon
I’ll be making it nice
Soon soon pretty soon
We’ll be the talk of the city
And it won’t be a pity
You won’t have to think twice
’Cause I’ll be making it nice
I made a mess out of all my aspirations
My own appointment book says I did
I went to work without plan or inspiration
My own angels ran and hid
It must look like a scandal
More than I can handle
But soon soon pretty soon
I’ll be making it pretty
Soon soon pretty soon
I’ll be making it nice
Soon soon pretty soon
We’ll be the talk of the city
And it won’t be a pity
You won’t have to think twice
’Cause I’ll be making it nice
Soon soon pretty soon
I’ll be making it pretty
Soon soon pretty soon
I’ll be making it nice
Soon soon pretty soon
We’ll be the talk of the city
And it won’t be a pity
You won’t have to think twice
’Cause I’ll be making it nice
@paulroe Feb 2022
Solid lucid crafted tune. Slightly melancholic tone but not overly so., which is in line with the hopeful optimism in seeing beyond the present conditions.
@johnstaples Feb 2022
Yeah, I'm hearing some of ol' Neil's influence here! Nice song and I love that hook "Soon soon pretty soon"! Another great line is "My own angels ran and hid"! Nice skirmishing!
@cicpisces Feb 2022
Accomplished song that has a good hook. Interesting take on the prompt. Performed well. Nice.
@zeekle1998 Feb 2022
A great take on the prompt. I like ghe pre chorus lyrics, a nice lead into the chorus.
@thedutchwidows Feb 2022
Great take on the prompt! Really nicely done.
@apolez3 Feb 2022
Great Guitar Play~pretty kewl lyrics,, enjoy you singing the chorus.
"My own angels ran and hid:" WOW this is a GREAT LINE!!!
@tcelliott Feb 2022
I love that opening line. And repeating it to open the second verse works so darn well. I like that repetition of soon, soon, too. Good chorus.
@mariekevinkmusic Feb 2022
Nice hook. I always want a pre chorus but rarely manage. Good work!
@writeandwrong Feb 2022
I think I've heard that chorus before lol... "soon" Very relatable!! I love how you went there when many only tell the other side in songs so it's pretty awesome you did this. That earworm of a chorus will be with me awhile. Awesome skirmish!!
@metalfoot Feb 2022
The prechorus was a really good structural idea for this lyric. Also I like the shift from minor like @pearlmanhattan said.
@scruffyblues Feb 2022
Great song! Really like the hook.
@coolparadiso Feb 2022
Yes that repetition works. Its a good lyric and changing keys was a good move made it that bit different and changed the emotional feel.
@whispermouse Feb 2022
Great storytelling. The prechorus is just great - I always struggle to add the little bits and pieces like that when under time pressure for a skirmish. Nice one!
@ajna1960 Feb 2022
A cool different take on the prompt, good on you.
This is an interesting moralistic story, told in a gentle and empathic way, at least it feels like that to me.
@pearlmanhattan Feb 2022
the repitition in the chorus is satisfying - and then the change from minor to major to minor just works so well! Well written and well performed! Great skirmish!
@andygriff Feb 2022
Pressed send too soon again lol. Wanted to add that's a good catchy chorus too :)
@andygriff Feb 2022
I really like this take on the prompt. Well done!