Feb 2022 needs-music lyrics lyrics-only collaboration needs-vocals looking-for-collaboration
If anyone likes these lyrics and would like to put them to music, I would be very happy. Please, feel free to alter the words any way you like…
She was pretty (Skirmish/ needs-music)
They say she was so pretty…
they say she was so beautiful…
for me, now they feel pity,
I keep crying at the moon…
Can´t tell I really knew her,
I can´t say we were really close…
but I´m not yet through with her,
strange if that´s the way it goes…
(Chorus)
She was pretty… so pretty…
she was as pretty as the morning sun,
she was pretty… as pretty…
as the sun that morning she left the city,
as pretty as the morning when she was gone…
They say she was so pretty,
of a beauty that could not wane,
my heart was young and gritty,
unaware of grief and pain…
My heart was a young pirate,
she was my treasure and my sin,
the rest, guess, is more private,
now she is gone with the wind…
(Chorus)
She was pretty… so pretty…
she was as pretty as the morning sun,
she was pretty… as pretty…
as the sun that morning she left the city,
as pretty as the morning when she was gone…
@willie70hawkins Feb 2022
Hey Arthur, I got off to a late start this year but I'm here now and I like this a lot. I'm already starting a melody, so it won't be long now.
@paulroe Feb 2022
This fits the vibe of where I want to be musically at the moment. Haven't been very creative lately but if I pick up guitar again at some point this month, will humbly request if I can songify this haunting ditty.
@thedutchwidows Feb 2022
There's a lovely sadness to the last two lines in the chorus - will make for a very melancholy song! Very nicely done!
@apolez3 Feb 2022
"My heart was a young pirate,
she was my treasure and my sin,
the rest, guess, is more private,
now she is gone with the wind…" this was my favorite bit!!
@corinnecurcio Feb 2022
Wonderful write, Arthur. A wistful lyric
@chroes Feb 2022
Is this a shanty? This could be a shanty, right? When the text went in the direction of "pirate", I imagined the lyrics to a more swinging rhythm, and I think that would totally make sense. Very nicely done!
@mariekevinkmusic Feb 2022
I think it is murderous. I like that it could be both though.
@tcelliott Feb 2022
Sad and beautiful all wrapped up in one. What a great take on the skirmish.
@writeandwrong Feb 2022
Aesthetically pleasing to read. It flows so well. Tight write; sincere nostalgia. Relatable to all! Would love to hear this set to music.
@metalfoot Feb 2022
Ah, the love-from-a-distance motif. Nicely written!
@kahlo2013 Feb 2022
Beautiful chorus in the sentiment and structure. Flows beautifully and will be lovely set to music. Love that wistful sad twist in the last verse.
@coolparadiso Feb 2022
Ha ha Arthur you win for the most use of the word Pretty. :-) Youve gone the sad route and nicely told of missed opportunity or loss. Well done
@ajna1960 Feb 2022
Ooh I can't work out if this is a loved and lost song, or a song of a secret murderous event !
I can hear a trad country vibe maybe, with the old time story telling that usually brought with it.
This is a clever line:
"as pretty as the morning when she was gone…"
@pearlmanhattan Feb 2022
Beautiful, Arthur, as always. You have a gift with lyrics! you convey such a great picture of "Her" as well as your loss! Great skirmish!
@grenzgaengerin Feb 2022
so funny - i like this :D
@andygriff Feb 2022
Ooh I like this. Well done!