Feb 2022 alternative indie-rock post-punk
This is a song about.... Alcohol and lust (I suppose), and a cheap nightclub at 3AM.
The lyrics just came to me as I was writing them.
My friend NOEX helped out heaps in production, and he replayed the bass an added some guitar.
Thanks for the really helpful suggestions RE the outro, I extended it and added a guitar hook and a fadeout. Seems more 'complete'. Now I can sleep easy.
#Verse_1
why don't you come onto me creep
instead of sitting in the corner fingering your drink
i saw it in your face
there was a flicker in your eyes
the light in here ain't great
but it don't lie
though it tries
#Verse_2
i’ve been waiting for someone like you
to climb those stairs and slide into this room
If i seem kinda desperate
its 'cause you flicked my switch
i love it when the carrot
is also the stick
that’s a neat trick
#Middle
Chemical waste
is my safe space
(etc)
#Outro
if i was any kind of man
i'd make you understand
i'd shave my hair
and cut my nails
and show you with my hands
i pour my own
i’m the great unknown
you don’t know what i am
when you stand up tall
i climb the walls
i'm the best thing you never had
#chorus
if you see me unsteady on my feet
don’t kid yourself darling it’s only the drink
but if you want me down on my knees
all you gotta do is ask me please
@sierain Mar 2022
The mix is excellent! No idea how it used to sound, but it's very enjoyable.
@kajati Feb 2022
@mattoxic this is amazing, I hadn’t heard this, it is the perfect post punk song !! And the outro Is wicked, love it !!
@nadine Feb 2022
Just heard it on the FAWMcast and it's a badass song with a great production. I love the guitar sound, and I adore love the pace of the vocals. The chorus is in my head. I'm not a big fan of fade out but this is just the right outro for this song. It captures the spirit very well. Honestly! Leave it as is.
@vegansongs Feb 2022
My weakness..jangly guitars. All the elements shine. Story flows , catchy chorus, you captured a soothing tension!
@berty38 Feb 2022
Late to the party here, but this is great.
@spazsquatch Feb 2022
Great lyrics, just fantastic. There is something a little disoriented about the images that really, really works in this context. Very impressed.
@pugetive Feb 2022
This is such a cool tune! To these ears it could easily fit on an Interpol record. Love the "though it tries" line, love the break transition, love the whole vibe and production here. Well done.
@rev Feb 2022
Yeah man..great vibe, great attitude!
and in agreement "the light " line is killer!
@zecoop Feb 2022
Awesome sound and I really LOVE the patience you take with the vocal lines. It has a ton of energy pent up that almost escapes, but lets just enough out to satisfy the listener and make them keep waiting. really well done and this is the kind of thing where *I* would go to the record store and look for it. It is a captivating song. :)
@engebretsen Feb 2022
Tight and lovely. I even think of Pink Floyd listen to this. Very good arrangement of the instruments in this song.
@paulh1237 Feb 2022
"the light in here ain't great but it don't lie" is such a burn and a great lyric. I love the insistent single jangling chord in the chorus, creates and real tension, and the chemical waste section is a great inversion agaisnt that.
@miga Feb 2022
Love these guitars, especially after the outro! the music sets the stage really well and it has that sad almost dissipated feel to it.
@emplate Feb 2022
Your vocals are really fitting in this style. I really like it how things gradually build up towards the chorus. I love the feeling when you realise things have grown quite big as the slowly added elements drop out for a quieter part. Don't know if I explained this clearly, but anyways, very nice build-up! :)
@gindark Feb 2022
I liked the outro, and the whole song had a great vibe. A lot of story to pack into a short few minutes. The music is very cool and well done, and the singing has such a punchy character, especially after the conversational style of the start. Well done!
@bandybum Feb 2022
Another strong piece of work. Great arrangement, cool delivery, all sounding tight and grooving.
Great and intriguing lyrics conjuring up a smoky backroom with a drama about to unfold.
Big up to NOEX.
On to the watchlist you go guys go :)
@loveonamixtape Feb 2022
Some great lyrics on this. Especially "the light in here ain't great
but it don't lie
though it tries"
I agree with @seppo that the outro is cool and should stay, though also agree the end is a bit abrupt and think maybe *adding* a guitar solo *after* could be cool!
@seppo Feb 2022
Definitely keep the outro. Loved it. Like the rest of the song too.
"i love it when the carrot
is also the stick
that’s a neat trick"
That's such an amazing line
@inkflow Feb 2022
I can see what you are saying out the outro, but the entire track gives me a very post-Floyd Syd Barrett feel and the suddenness of the end kind of helps feed into that, so I dig it!