Feb 2022 folk-pop guy-with-guitar gay
Well, for the first song that I have managed to write since last year's FAWM, I'm okay with it.
I have absolutely NO calluses, so once I got a bit of a guitar line in my head, I just recorded it, and decided to force words to it so I wouldn't have to keep playing endlessly, which wouldn't have ended well.
Also, I have mostly forgetting how to record in GarageBand on my phone. So, the audio comes in and out.
The truth is that I am struggling just to stay in a positive frame of mind in this insane world of ours, and to care about, well, anything. It makes it rather difficult to write songs, at least for me. My IRL friend, @fiteclub tells me that I have to keep plodding through and to keep caring about things, especially songwriting. I will do what I can. So, in that spirit, here's this little ditty.
Everything seems dark, It's rare to find a spark,
And I don't even know the way that I was meant to go anymore.
My feet are made of stone, I'm tired to the bone,
And every way I turn just shows another bridge to burn in this storm.
But he says to look on, Focus on the dawn,
And recognize the steps along the path won't always be level and smooth.
So he offers up his hand, and seems to have a plan,
And though I cannot see the line he walks it might be nice to let my worries be soothed.
He says to keep my head held high, and lock my eyes on the brightest point in the sky.
Everything's gone still, the quiet overspills,
The quake inside my head no longer aches, no longer spreads, no longer holds me in place.
Though nothing's really changed, and nothing's rearranged,
The tiny stars up in the night are hardly bright enough to light up all this empty space.
Still he says to keep my head held high, and lock my eyes on the brightest point in the sky.
He says it may always be dark, but stick with him, and he'll show me the spark.
@dragondreams Mar 2022
This is beautiful. The guitar work sounds fine to me! And when you start singing... yeah. It all comes together perfectly. Life's hard, but we need to keep focused. :-)
@johnstaples Mar 2022
This is stunningly beautiful!!! First, your vocals are amazing! So sincere and strong! And I am just mesmerized with the melody and how you sing the verses! Those slowly sung first lines followed by the sped up final line is just so utterly delightful to listen to!!! This technique delivers such interesting dynamics in the song! As I was listening I was thinking how nice that was and it doesn't even need a chorus but then you delivered an equally delightful chorus!!! Your lyrics present such a lovely, inspiring message!
Everything comes together to make this such an outstanding song! One of the very best I heard all February long! Congrats on writing, performing and producing such a gem!
@bfwaite Feb 2022
Your voice is so pretty!
I really like the rhythm of your second line in each verse and the way your melody descends(“ And I don't even know the way that I was meant to go anymore.”). Has a sense of lullaby or self-soothing to it that pairs well with the overall idea of “keep going”.
@frey Feb 2022
love that verse melody over those melancholy chords, makes me wanna sway. And just the right amount of reverb! :) Your guitar playing is lovely and sounds very comfortable for not having any calluses, lol!
@jeustan Feb 2022
I second every comment complimenting your beautiful voice and confess a smidge of envy as well. Your singing has a je ne sais quoi quality that is disarming—delicate yet grounded and brassy.
It's amazing how this song recorded on a phone hits with the kind of sound quality you would expect from Guggenheim Grotto as opposed to an early Mountain Goats record (also a favorite of mine).
You've inspired a deep and emotional contemplation of determination and spirit in light of worldly darkness. Thanks, great write.
@wurzelfrau Feb 2022
Yeah, stick with him <3
What a beautiful song. ahhh, my heart is all warm and fuzzy now!
@cblack Feb 2022
This is really good. Your voice tells a story so well, and the chord progression seems appropriate for the lyrics. Nicely done!
@fiteclub Feb 2022
I am so damned jealous of your voice, sir. And -- oh shit! These lyrics! Wow. This is so good. And that guy sounds like he knows where its at.
This was well-worth waiting until the 6th.
@tageule Feb 2022
Thanks for sharing this. So very relatable. Also, your singing is absolutely beautiful. <3
@auditasum Feb 2022
It's nice to hear your voice and strums again. This world has a lot of darkness but there's light too if we look for it, and I think your song reflects that. We can't fix the whole world but we can be here for each other. <3<3<3
@jorh Feb 2022
Wow this is beautiful Wayne. Them verses are fab - the short couplets followed by the long, flowing melody of the final lines. And when your voice soars on the refrain to match the lyric of ‘high’ and ‘sky’ it is a real moment. There’s definitely still a spark in your songwriting!!
@madeline Feb 2022
You have such a great voice and your lyrics are fantastic! I am also composing on my phone in GB and have no calluses to speak of on my hands. Looking forward to hearing more from you!
@kenmattsson Feb 2022
This is so beautiful, in lyric and your performance. I love the tone and the tiny spark of hopefulness in this. I'm sure that this song will be the spark for others. I shows that that spark is in your already. I love when your voice goes up. Congrats on breaking through your first song!