Loved the idea for a skirmish. Thank you Andrea for lighting the fire on this one for me.
I took my opposites in a different direction.
Opposite Pairs
My brother and I
Are Siamese twins
But one is black, the other white
When you look at our skins
And everything about us
Is polar it's true
Opposites don't attract
Cause we're stuck together like glue
We're opposite, opposite
Opposite pairs
And when we walk down the street
We get many stares
Opposite, opposite
Opposite pairs
Who take life in stride
With so many glares
My brother and I
Rarely agree
He's got his side to politics
And I see what I see
No matter what will happen
We try to adapt
Living life with two heads
In a sibling rivalry trapped
We're opposite, opposite
Opposite pairs
And when we walk down the street
We get many stares
Opposite, opposite
Opposite pairs
Who take life in stride
With so many glares
Dating is a problem
One likes boys
The other likes girls
We're opposite, opposite
Opposite pairs
And when we walk down the street
We get many stares
Opposite, opposite
Opposite pairs
Who take life in stride
With so many glares
sunfire © 2022
@hmstreetteam Feb 2022
I like the way the narrative takes something familiar and pushes it to the extremes to make the point.
@zeekle1998 Feb 2022
An interesting and intriguing take on the prompt. And a good metaphor for many people living side by side, but have completely different outlooks on the world. A very clever write.
@vivalarayna Feb 2022
This is quite the different direction and good use of the prompt. "In a sibling rivalry trapped" sounds like an awful fate, but Iman only child, so... very clever.
@odilongreen Feb 2022
Such an intriguing storyline! I'm really interested in how this would translate to music: dark and moody? Experimental and strange? Maybe go for upbeat for the contrast to the difficult situation presented by the words? So many possibilities!
@tunecat Feb 2022
That was unexpected!
Some interesting lines
@tunecat Feb 2022
That was unexpected!
Some interesting lines
@hurongrand Feb 2022
What a cool take on the skirmish topic! I was really struck by the line "Opposites don't attract / Cause we're stuck together like glue" — very clever, nice work!
@tjeff Feb 2022
That is a creative take on the prompt - love it! Some great lines and images. And a strangely believable story too.
@carleybaer Feb 2022
Ha! Nice twist. The situation sounds awful but the lyrics are great!
@markg Feb 2022
That's too funny!
Of all the sibling troubles to have, imagine your twin listens to the talk radio hosts you can't stand.
@kahlo2013 Feb 2022
Creative and unique take on the skirmish! Nice tight write that really sings off the page in the chorus!
@andrea Feb 2022
That is a super clever take on the prompt. Ingenious! Alot of great lines, but I think these are my favorite: Living life with two heads
In a sibling rivalry trapped"
@berni1954 Feb 2022
Wow! That's a tangential approach to the topic. Look forward to hearing this set to music.
One little piece of advice, in this couplet:
"Living life with two heads
With a sibling rivalry trapped"
Why not change the second "with" that starts the second line to an "In"