On a bit if a roll using this particular technoque- actually it’s more of a documentation of one of the ways I actually wrote - particularly this kind of stream of consciousy stuff.
The music will come later YouTube uploading seems to take a while- erm tgat might be cause this one lasts 15 mins. You’ll need to flip ahead a bit
Slay
Doing this with blue tooth headphones a gif of latency so not gonna try and put the snare in
You say you’d rather
Stay and I’m sure you
Are not bending the obvious.
You n me we are
Bound together
An eternity awaits.
Dread keeps these knots tight.
What you said- or rather
You didn’t cause
We both know
That’s the truth .
Ain’t it!
We’re better off in this
Distooian virtual dream
To keep close - cause all isn’t
Just what it may seem.
And who
And who
Yes who might be tge ‘they’
That seem to lurk in every corner.
That tell us not to stray
In word thought or deed
Who are they ( they)
That sit here in this .
Thrones and with looks regal
And hiss … and whisper ( hiss)
Speak into our ears our heads
Speak into the void
Tell us to fear ( fear)
Tell us but we already hear
Tge coming from far
Far
Far away!
Slay!!
Slay!!
It’s all they say!
Slay!
Slay!
It’s what they say!!
And we who remain crouch
We grip each other’s hands
Your fingers pressed into mine
Feel the rings pinch my skin
We who would disdain know
We have chanced it -
Chosen ‘freedom’ over
Toeing the line
Abs now
We’re the hunted
Maybe not today
But hunted
Neverrhelesss
And haunted
Restless dreams in our troubled souls
Nervous tics of consciousness
Yet we live yes live
Abd tge rest of you - well
Slay……
@berty38 Mar 2022
This whole style is fascinating artistically. I think of it as something that really captures things familiar to us today. Writing in the notes app on the smartphone. It's like a new form of performance poetry where instead of reading the poetry, you write it. The audience looking at your screen recording feels like they're the ones writing it. And the hypnotic beat enhances that trance.
@ahumburg Mar 2022
Creating on the fly! YES! Hunted. Haunted. Great job matching the vibe of the song with the lyric.
@jayjay Feb 2022
This is conceptually really cool. #tit4tat
@coolparadiso Feb 2022
#tit4tat time very haunting an east meets west feel . good lyrics written as well! hypnotic thats it thats the word! i see a monastery and one of those big bells!
@zeekle1998 Feb 2022
A dramatic write. A flow of thoughts expressed.
@nadine Feb 2022
Spot on drama. Sounds a bit like you followed your train of thoughts? Interesting technique.
@davidtaro Feb 2022
Wow, real drama in the lyrics here. The 'we who remain crouch' verse is particularly visceral. Great write!
@corinnecurcio Feb 2022
Great words! Dark and Game of Throne-ish.
@tjeff Feb 2022
Stream writing that makes a lot of sense. I like the lines “dread keeps these knots tight” and “feel the rings pinch my skin.”
@kahlo2013 Feb 2022
Powerful! I like the short pithy lines and the emotion that comes through in the lyric. Love the last stanza in particular.