Song 3 of the 2022 FAMW songwriting challenge. This one tackles the assigned topic for week 1, a body part, including 6 different body parts in the lyrics.
WARNING - Mild Language
Note: Not autobiographical.
Did you think I wouldn't notice your arms wrapped around him?
Did you think I wouldn't mind, you could just walk back in?
Well your stuff's in your truck and I'm changing the locks
Don't come crawling back, I've had enough
We're done, so damn done.
Every excuse you've used is full of holes
You're out with your friends but they don't know where you are
You were too drunk to drive, had to crash on a couch
But the marks on your neck say something else
We're done, so damn done.
Done with the lies on your poison lips
Don't come 'round here I don't give a shit
This broken heart will mend in time
I'm moving on, I think you'll find
That I'm done, so damn done.
Don't think the sway of your hips will change my mind
A lesser man would kick your sweet behind.
No last chance you've had more than a few
Stacked up like cordwood I'm over you
We're done, so damn done
Done with the lies on your poison lips
Don't come 'round here I don't give a shit
This broken heart will mend in time
I'm moving on, I think you'll find
That I'm done, so damn done.
I'd say it was fun, and at times that's true
But it so wasn't worth what you put me through
I'm done, so damn done.
Done with the lies on your poison lips
Don't come 'round here I don't give a shit
This broken heart will mend in time
I'm moving on, I think you'll find
That I'm done, so damn done.
I'm done, so damn done
I'm done, so damn done.
@gregwere Feb 2022
Another nice one, great style.
@janeg Feb 2022
I saw that it isn’t autobiographical but you put so much emotion and pain into your singing. Very strong. Would make a great music video.
@aeye Feb 2022
This one has a bit of a James Taylor vibe to it. Maybe it's weird but I always enjoyed a good song about heartbreak.
@jessi14 Feb 2022
The topic is tragic, but the angry vibe feels appropriate. Broken hearts mend in time, true that :-)
@writeandwrong Feb 2022
Oh, this is one of my favorites of yours! Fantastic bridge; lines are straight and to the point; presentations melds so well with the feeling of the lyrics. Excellent flow and story line. Kudos!!! Hope you'll do something with this post-FAWM! Thank you for your kind comments on the Hobo song! :)
@wacha Feb 2022
I love the grit in this song, it pulls no punches. That driving acoustic guitar is complimented perfectly by the lead licks. This is a solid and relatable break up song, nice work.
@bobskyyoung Feb 2022
Excellent Stu! The groove, tone, word choices, and the impassioned vocals just before the guitar solo - striking.
@beat Feb 2022
Sad but great track and delivery.
@tseaver Feb 2022
Nice write! Taps the vein of the BTB cheating song with wit and just a little venom. The arrangement suits: maybe the guitar fills are a bit hot (at least, they seem a couple of dB hotter than the vocal).
@seanbrennan Feb 2022
I hear the pain the vocal delivery, especially on the last chorus. I hope this isn't autobiographical! There's an interesting double entendre in the second verse - "No last chance, you've had more than a few" - maybe antagonist only calls the protagonist / wants to make up when they're drunk ("had more than a few") and lonely?
I think the mix really works, too! There is less rhythm guitar than I'm "expecting," but that just serves to make the driving percussion hammer home the vocal anger all the more.
@silvermediapro Feb 2022
oooh, love the muted strumming on the backing track! your voice is also dope too! :D great tune, very catchy!