I wrote this one rather quickly but I really like the feel of the song. Puts me on a beach some where.
Hope you like it
Your Eyes
Sitting all alone, at the end of a pier
Listening to waves, as sunlight disappears
Night sky Rolla in, stars begin to glow
Sitting here alone just me and my merlot
And they say your eyes
Are the window to your soul
If you believe that
They hold more secrets than you'll know
Memories and ghosts
That refuse to let go
Yes, your eyes tell the tale
Neath a night sky, as I walk all alone
My umbrella the stars, on my way home
Lost in my thoughts, that invade my mind
Looking for peace, one day I will find
Yes, your eyes tell the tale..
@sunnymae Feb 2022
Wow you get right to it in your first two lines. You set the scene up so well, I was there instantly. Your chorus lyrics are so powerful. Clearly the words of a sage who has lived and learned on the trail of life.
Your voice speaks volumes and delivers self-reflection beautifully.
This is a great write!
@pabrizzer Feb 2022
yes i like the feel of the song too
@kenmattsson Feb 2022
Lovely writing and performance. I love the glow-Merlot rhyme! Really evocative, even with so few words. Congrats!
@ductapeguy Feb 2022
Beautiful vivid imagery. Fantastic.
@berni1954 Feb 2022
This is lovely, wonderful evocation of those moments when we are alone and doing mental inventory. Two super verses and a great chorus!
Love the glow / merlot rhyme. it's bot clever and spot on for the character!