I realize this has a totally unorthodox structure. It may well be too vexingly difficult to set to music. I play around a ton with rhymes here, which was fun. Can anyone pull this off or is it impossible?
NOTE: @sdcpaman proved it wasn't impossible. Check out our collab!
As we take a walk at sunset
There’s only one set of words in my head
I’d turn red if you knew what it was
Because
I’m the type of guy
Who’s just a little shy
When it’s time for expressing emotions
As the ocean keeps washing ashore
I want more time with you
Endless hours to do
Everything
Everything
Everything
You want to do
As seabirds fly past
Those three words
On the tip of my tongue
Make my lungs fill with air
And my heart beat faster
So, I’ll dare to say
What you may already know is true:
I love you
@sdcpaman Feb 2022
I didn't do the song in a 1930s style. I heard a soft acoustic song and recorded some music....would love to share but I don't know the process and can't seem to find any help with this on the website. Any help would be appreciated to post the recording I made of this song. Doug, do you have to invite me to post?
@roddy Feb 2022
Very cool. And very 1930's. Good to see that @sdcpaman will add music.
@sdcpaman Feb 2022
I have some ideas. Ok If I give it a shot? New to FAWM....how do I add a song if I record?
@oswlek Feb 2022
It's beautiful, Doug. The internal rhymes make for some fun dancing about with the vocal delivery. I have some ideas, but I am struggling to get them to all play nice with each each other, mostly because the sections change before they really set the foundation. I'll keep working at it.
@coolparadiso Feb 2022
Of course it is- you just make a different musical structure to fit .I am not saying its easy although it may be! I am a bit snowed but if its here ,which i doubt, in a few days i will try to prove myself right or wrong. I think its a really interesting lyric
@wylddandelyon Feb 2022
Awwww, this is sweet. It is definitely not impossible, though you’d probably need something jazzy or experimental. It’s definitely not suitable for the make a traditional style ballad challenge.