Failure was the writing prompt. This is your chance to hear the angry Rick Aster.
By the time I hear from you it’s some kind of fail
Your date for tonight is probably in jail
Or he got into some kind of a fight
Tell me I’m right
But you’re not the kind to sit there and wonder
You’re looking for a man who is bringing the thunder
And you’re on your way to plan B
And that would be me
Well I know that you’re feeling desire
And sometimes it comes down to the wire
But you’re not a very good liar
Light your own damn fire
By the time I hear from you it’s ten forty-five
And the clock says the day is barely alive
There is not much left of the night
Tell me I’m right
But don’t think I haven’t noticed that you’re leading me on
That’s the way you played it all along
The man you keep in your pocket
To prove you’ve still got it
Well I know that you’re feeling desire
And sometimes it comes down to the wire
But you’re not a very good liar
Light your own damn fire
By the time I hear from you it’s some kind of fail
Your date for tonight is probably in jail
That’s the way it tends to go
I know
Well I know that you’re feeling desire
And sometimes it comes down to the wire
But you’re not a very good liar
Light your own damn fire
@devslev Feb 2022
The bridge is especially nice, keeps the tune pushing nicely! I hear a full band in my head with this one (a good thing!)
@lcad Feb 2022
Great imagery on lighting the fire and solid lyric all around. Catchy with nice changes. Great stuff!
@jwhanberry Feb 2022
Love this song. It's a keeper for sure. Great skirmish.
@pianoquest Feb 2022
Wow, this song grabs you from the start and just keeps going. You get a lot of mileage out of "probably in jail." It makes me wonder about all the previous episodes that led up to this one. Nice work!
@andrea Feb 2022
Wow, super skirmish! I love the story so much. The vibe of the music and vocals fits perfectly.
@pearlmanhattan Feb 2022
Oh I love this in so many ways! writing and rhymes are solid, topic is relatable, performance is raw and honest! Well done! I was holding up my lighter and singing along! Great Skirmish!
@vivalarayna Feb 2022
Lol, this is brilliant! So many great lines, but I was hooked from the start with "By the time I hear from you it’s some kind of fail/Your date for tonight is probably in jail"... and it kept getting better from there. Very clever take on the prompt. Thanks for participating!
@krrisstin Feb 2022
this is a great story song that really pulls me into this character and the feeling of being someone's backup plan :) really nice skirmish!!