@downfallroad lyric help and song structure help
@sfparadox music, lyrics, and terrible singing and awful guitar solo
Floating away through
the depths of space
celestial bodies
speak to me
echoes of twilight for
the days gone past
Forming around in
this cosmic haze
A neverending curse and gift
Through infinity I drift
Immortal body but broken mind
A frozen journey of endless time
Solar winds propel me away
Drifting in this cosmic ballet
Gravity's burden I hope to see
Pulling me down to set me free
@waltermosch Feb 2022
The lyrics have a 'Monster Magnet' feel to it. If you know that band. Rocks!
@williamjames Feb 2022
Very cool song, with a lot of disconnect between the parts. Makes it feel alien which ends up reinforcing the lyrics, which are stand out awesome!
@chickenjail Feb 2022
It might be cool to use some echo/reverb to tie into the vastness of the concept. Especially on that very last vocal, just to let it ring out into space for a bit. Nicely done!
@whispermouse Feb 2022
I'm into the scifi lyrics! Nice reprise ending, and putting the guitar solo over the chorus feel was a great choice.
@driftwood1 Feb 2022
Love the huge dynamic change between the chorus and verse. Nice lead too!
@nadine Feb 2022
No need to hide. I like that you two turned this idea into a song. Mysterious spacey lyrics and I clearly see a structure. I don't think that the solo is worse! Rock on!