I haven't written many songs with lyrics and this is the first in a long while. It really is a weird thing to struggle and then in an instant feel like it was nothing.
I wrote most of this after work and couldn't decide if it needed another verse at the beginning or end - I'm leaning towards beginning
Thanks to anyone who listens
He's really gone and done it now
she didnt love him anyhow
known her as a teen
He was really kinda mean
didnt know where she'd been
till she left
Singing songs about moving on
doesn't help him now
All was at stake And
he cant shake
The feeling of the end
He wears candles on his head
to remind himself that he aint dead
He's no
glossy magazine
He's older then he seems
never really clean
He's not starting now
Singing songs about moving on
doesn't help him now
All was at stake And
he can not shake
The feeling of the end
feeling of the end
of the end
@fonte Feb 2022
This is nice. Like @suburbanfolk said about the sparse line/rushed line that works so well. I Like your Voice too feels very authentic and ‘you’.
@suburbanfolk Feb 2022
I love the movement between the sparse melodic line and the rushed bouncey lines!
@timfatchen Feb 2022
This is solid and entire to itself. Why add more verses? 2:30, it's short enough to have impact, get the message over AND leave the listener wishing for more. (and coming back to replay). Enjoyed this, perhaps because I'm heading toward the end. But I think another listener would empathise too. Nice guitar work. Hey, we're building more and more from Oz into this, good to see.