host ajna1960
prompt Too Much Baggage
First run at my plan to use Abstract Beats loops as a basis. Needs work! This is terribly rough and took twice the time. Didn't even get the chorus in. New to Reaper, new to loops. So it goes.
Loop: Abstract Beats 19
Guitars: '94 Fender Mexi-Telecaster
Amp: '78 Marshall Mk II
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Note: Skirmish: 1 hour to write and record
Constructive criticism is always welcome. Tell me all about it!
Too Much Baggage
I just woke up all loaded down
Makes it hard to get around
Can't find myself away to lift my package
When I'm stuck here in the mud with too much baggage
Sometimes late at night I think I see
What livin' this life has done to me
Cryin' out to try and heal the damage
Can't get away from too much baggage.
Ch.
Too much baggage
How do ya manage
How you gonna ever take advantage
Watch the world succumb to ravage
Go out misbehavin' like a savage
©2022 John W Hanberry (ASCAP)
All Rights Reserved
@liz561 Mar 2022
I got a feeling that the trappings of modern life are creating chaos and a sense of unease. The vocals gave me a strong vibe of David Byrne!
@devslev Feb 2022
Nice nervous beat and like the robot calling the shout/sing voice. Enjoyable!
@taracraig Feb 2022
I just woke up all loaded down... nice imagery here. Really sets the stage for the rest of the song. Great skirmish!
@markg Feb 2022
New to Reaper, and you wrote and recorded in just an hour? Pretty good. I have to relearn it every FAWM and 50/90. Like the sound, you're a rocker.
@tiller2 Feb 2022
Abstract beat/vox builds a disturbing tension, then the crisp guitar chords give the listener something to hang onto. Good vocal, and promising lyric. I hope you finish this! I'm trying to learn Reaper, too, after many false starts. Good luck with it.
@sheilerk Feb 2022
That woke me up!! Some great rhymes and phrases that really put your point across nicely, along with that driving sound and vocals.
@berni1954 Feb 2022
Especially like that second verse - it's a cracker! (1970s Irish for great).
Look forward to seeing if you develop it fully.
@whispermouse Feb 2022
That loop is POWERFUL and slightly anxiety-inducing. I like the contrast with the Tele.
Nice rhymes with package/baggage/damage/manage/etc, especially since a lot of them are "baggage"-related words.
Nice skirmish!
@vivalarayna Feb 2022
Love the Speak-n-Spell guest appearance! Totally understand how working with new tech under a time constraint can be tough, but props for pushing yourself in a new direction! I really hope you'll revisit this and finish the demo when possible. You've got a very groovy start here.
@wylddandelyon Feb 2022
You should finish this and update the sound file. It would be good to hear the chorus, and also it's a good idea to train your brain to finish things. (I'm still working on that; I hope one of these days I can get the force of habit behind finishing my own stuff.)
@fourzeroes Feb 2022
Wild. You are very talented and possibly slightly alarming. How come you faded out before you got to the chorus?
@sw1n3flu Feb 2022
SAY IT!
It's all off-kilter in a good way - beats are in your face and those chords are slicing their way through.
I really wanna hear that chorus drop...!!!
@ajna1960 Feb 2022
Oh gawd LOVE that beat !
This is so funky, it's great. This is one great song Mr @jwhanberry