Even though this was a prompted challenge, the writing felt very organic and natural...
If I said
what I really wanted to say
If I told you
That I felt this way
Would it be ok
Would it be ok
If I fell
Off this trembling lip
Stead of catching
Myself before I slip
Would it be ok
Would it be ok
Would it be ok
if you pretended not to hear me
or remember what I say
If it’s not ok
If it’s not ok
I don’t know where I’m going with this
And Don’t you think that I don’t give a shit
Just know that something will go wrong
If I let it out
So I’ll keep it right here
on the tip of my
tongue
Can't let it out
So I’ll keep it right here
on the tip of my
tongue
Would you mind
If I didn’t play safe next time
Would you care
If I took a step across the line
Would it be ok
Would it be ok
Would it be ok
if I can’t take it back
When everything has changed
Coz it’s not ok
To live this way
I don’t know where I’m going with this
And Don’t you think that I don’t give a shit
Just know that something could go wrong
If I let it out
So I’ll keep it right here
on the tip of my
tongue
Can't let it out
So I’ll keep it right here
on the tip of my
tongue
@berty38 Mar 2022
Really heartfelt lyrics and performance. Something I like about the lyrics is that it remains ambiguous what it is that you’re holding back. The quiet sound really fits that well, as if you want to say something louder but you’re keeping quiet. I agree with others that the chorus is really cool.
@terenziano Feb 2022
I’d buy that album.
@frostin Feb 2022
yeah, agree on the hook, works well.
@blindsheepdog Feb 2022
Tender but groovey... nice hook too
@janice Feb 2022
Oh mate, whispered vulnerability and contained emotions. Gorgeous
@pumpkinhead Feb 2022
Wonderfully vulnerable. Thanks.
Peace
@polo75 Feb 2022
Lovely, gentle and really relatable. Love this!